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INTEMPERANCE VIII - Chapter 11, Changing of the Guard

🕑 Added 2024-06-09 06:00:57 +0000 UTC

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William Cleveland

Forget Matt, what about Charlie?

Mark WEISS

COME ON, You have to be dying to use the name "rand Oldfellow " again :-) I still laugh when I think about it.

Al Steiner

No promises, but I'll see what I can do.

Al Steiner

There have been many mentions about the Nerdlys being mostly kosher as they are Jewish. They have been known to cheat a bit at times. And the Kingsleys wanting a pool has been mentioned multiple times in previous chapters.

Al Steiner

I'm sure. I named it after the elementary school that I attended.

Mark WEISS

Unrelated but it would fun/interesting to have a Mindy Snow, Greg Oldfellow sighting

Mark WEISS

thought the same thing. I think it will put an interesting path for the story

JC

Who? The gay guys?

wulf losee

Can't wait to see how Matt deals with them — and they, him.

JC

Happy to see some gay characters in honor of Pride month!!

mdapkins

Notes: Jake asked as he stowed the suitcase in the cargo department after weighing it. department->compartment? On Sunday, instead going to mass instead of going Sean Morgon was apparently the spokesperson Is it "Morgon" or "Morgan" (he's later introduced as Sean Morgan)

mdapkins

Thanks for the chapter, Al. Sad to see Elsa departing, but it looks like we have some new fun characters introduced. Looking forward to the next one!

JC

I love this chapter!

JC

after a quick google search - are you guys sure it's not "Nichols"?

JC

and here I was wondering if there was actually a John T Nicholas school!

JC

Ok, I'm really confused. Did I miss something? When did Nerdly start keeping kosher? and when did Jake decide to get a pool?

JC

Yeah pretty sure that's what Al meant. It is super hot and not the first time it's appeared in Al's fiction - the other Meghan (the vampire one) was really into it!

JC

Ha!

JC

Not quite all fruits! Fun fact: the fruit of a tree in its first three years is not kosher.

Oracle

Excellent chapter! One note, though: when Andre is talking about the wine marketing, he says "free reign". It should be "free rein". The expression comes from horses being allowed to do what they want because the reins are slack (or "free").

James Harrold

probably the breast milk thing.

Artulo

Thanks for another enjoyable chapter. If there was anything 'squicky', I am either getting jaded or I must have missed it. ;-)

Al Steiner

I don't know. She doesn't keep in touch with me.

Al Steiner

The he being referred to is Kelvin. He is the one that likes to sit at the computer or read.

Al Steiner

Thank you.

Al Steiner

You're welcome. Thank you for all your patronage and assistance with details over the years.

James Harrold

Was wonder what Celia's sister is up too as we have really only heard about the parents and brother.

Eric

Great chapter. I'm sad about Elsa's retirement, but I knew it would happen someday!!! A few nitpicks/comments, which you can ignore or accept as you like!! 1) The beginning of the chapter offered no explanation as to why Elsa was flying with Jake and with Celia's parents. Obviously I figured out it was a family visit from later context, but I was confused for a minute, thinking she had already retired and I missed it or something. 2) The part about Jake's LA cars and their maintenance was interesting. Since Jake has "money falling out of his asshole," why wouldn't he pay someone to maintain his LA cars for him? As I assume he does with his LA house. Hard to imagine Jake sitting in a dealership service department waiting room for 4 hours!! 3) "Kosher" pickles aren't necessarily kosher from a Jewish dietary standpoint. They're called that because they're made in the traditional Jewish fashion, with garlic in the brine. (https://www.epicurious.com/expert-advice/best-pickle-brands-buying-guide-article#:~:text=Nor%20does%20it%20have%20anything,has%20garlic%20in%20the%20brine.) Pickles (and all fruits and vegetables in general) are kosher by default. They'd only be non-kosher if they'd come into contact with something "traif" (non-kosher) along the way. But being labelled as "kosher" or "kosher dill" is meaningless. That's a style of pickle, not an indicator of kashrut. 4) "Weston" was also spelled as both "Westen" and "Westin" throughout the chapter.

Adam

The last few chapters have been very good. Celia's parents were entertaining characters I enjoyed getting to know. Possible typo on page 9. "She was a forty-four year old woman who had found her dream job working for rich people with a single child who was absolutely no trouble at all. He liked nothing better than to simply read or look things up on the internet." Think the second sentence should start with a She instead of He. In Massachusetts there is a John T Nicholas school which my cousin's kids attend. No member of my cousin's family knows who John T Nicholas is. So apparently John is famous enough to get schools named after him, but not famous enough for most people to know who he is.

Russ Wideman

excellent Chapter.....

RLDel

His handshake has firm and manly. ..was.. There are a few misplaced words in there which may be due to autocorrect.

Al Steiner

Will fix in an edit. Thanks.

Jamie

After talking about Jake's scars you used Her for Sean.

Adam Driscoll

Busy night catching up for me: i read Ch 8-11. Wow, Al, that's quite a journey in 4 chapters (and several months). All-in-all, this was really well told, and the transition from 'expectant parents' to 'new baby' was well told (I remember those days all too well). The introduction of the new dudes was well done, too. Thank you for some great stories.