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The Unified Theorem - Chapter 20

🕑 Added 2024-08-16 14:51:11 +0000 UTC

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Sebastian Pop

Well, guess this chapter was a bust then. I was so sure that he'd be the perfect POV to blindside. Oh well.

Sebastian Pop

He had more than a third, but yeah, he got a raw deal here.

Sebastian Pop

Also yes, the elementals are alright.

Robert H.

Hm. While I liked the chapter, I think there's a certain something that keeps it from being a truly satisfying ending. It's definitely not a moment of triumph; just a sad tragedy limping towards its end. While it would be out of character for Aiden's perspective, I think leaving Wayland's fate ambiguous isn't the right choice here. We've had several chapters worth of things not going to plan/getting worse, and I think including a light at the end of the tunnel (confirmation of Wayland's life/survival) would have shifted the tone into something better. However, it might not be a problem in the future - what feels awful at the end of a chapter in a serial feels differently when you can just start reading the next chapter. One thing I will say is that the whole 'Wayland casts nuke' thing didn't feel nearly as interesting or as cool because it was from Perenolde's perspective. Heck, his perspective in general is... unpleasant is the wrong word, but it's 'work' to read from. He's just so deluded, and so hypocritical, that I can't even find sympathy for him that would make his perspective interesting or enjoyable, especially after reading other chapters from his POV. And there wasn't enough comeuppance for it to feel like vindication either. With all that said, I really do like your writing. It always brightens my day when I get to read new chapters from you, and I can't wait to see where this goes next.

Ashaeron

Almost feel bad for Korialstrasz here. Find ancient mortal enemies infesting kingdom, start fight, get ambushed and killed, get resurrected, keep fighting, get blown up again. Dude has like a third of the context for what's going on, too.

Sebastian Pop

No resurrection without a body, unfortunately. I'm glad you liked the cuckoo subtext. Those typos I'll only be able to notice after I don't work on or read Unified Theorem for at least two weeks.

Judah Frankel

Thanks for the chapter! Solid chapter all around, IMHO. Loved the fight scenes, and Perenolde getting his final comeuppance was very satisfying. I also thought that whole bit about how Perenolde modeled his whole kingdom around that cuckoo was very insightful.(Plus, Aiden didn’t even realize the irony.) Quite a few typos to resolve, and I’m curious whether Krasus can be resurrected after a nuking, but overall I liked it. BTW, are the steam elementals OK?

Sebastian Pop

It's not a perfect solution, but it's how I'll keep doing things. It's why I've managed to keep updating really.

Zerak

The Stormwind part would have likely rounded out the chapter. It’s one of the limitations of posting stories chapter by chapter. On the bright side it shouldn’t be an issue for someone reading the story for the first time as the chapter itself isn’t bad, it just feels like an in between chapter. Better to post what you have rather than try to push for an even longer chapter and drain yourself. That way lays burnout.

Sebastian Pop

By far weaker than all of them.

Sebastian Pop

I'm sad to hear that. I originally envisioned including the Stormwind part in this too, but it would have taken me twice as long to put it in, and the chapter would have been more than double the length (if I could actually stand focusing on it that long, action-packed chapters are pretty energy-hungry on the mind). Sorry about that, but it just didn't work out. Yes, the birds thing is true to life, cuckoos really are that evil. As for why the other birds don't relocate, why doesn't everyone move out of Detroit?

Fran

Hiroshima was 16 kilotons, Nagasaki 25 kilotons, the strongest (Tsar) was 50 kilotons

Fran

I mean how many kilotons of energy did his explosion release? If you make a scale with the famous atomic bombs which place would he rank in energy released?

Zerak

The chapter did feel very disjointed. For a second I thought he might do some time manipulation by using the light to cast into the past and change shit. Then for a while I thought the king would get away and stretch this arc even further.

Zerak

So he nuked the castle. Not gona lie the ending felt kinda unsatisfying. Likely because a lot has not been explained since the kings perspective was disjointed, but mostly since it’s been a very longer time building up to this, and each chapter seems to just push things off to the next chapter, which wouldn’t an issue if not for how long It takes between chapters. So on the plus side the story as a whole isn’t as impacted, but reading it chapter by chapter (roughly once a month) makes it feel a bit hollow when you go in expecting the chapter to actually wrap up this arc only for it to feel like a (I don’t want to say a bridging chapter since it’s not that so ..) like an incomplete chapter, like it cut off before the conclusion. The previous 2 chapters were somehow better even though this is technically the conclusion. My reply is mostly based on the comment you wrote at the start of last chapter “next chapter will conclude the show of shit”. Plus with it being 3am by the time I finished (was excited to read the finale that I decided to push past sleepiness and read). Sorry if this comment is all whiny and negative, just felt like I had to vent so I can let go of the negative feelings and fall asleep. The part with the birds was interesting though, is that an actual thing that happens in nature? Because I feel like the birds might just want to relocate.

Sebastian Pop

I don't understand the question. You mean what would he name it?

Fran

What would be the equivalent in terms of "famous" atomic bombs of his little kaboom?

Sebastian Pop

Well, in fairness, right below the blast source is where the least of the force concentrates, in an airborne explosion. Of course, that assumes there isn't a forcefield containing and redirecting everything inward.

Abhi

Haha, nah I got that part. It's the talking that went by me after a certain point.

Fran

The size of the balls to detonate an atomic bomb equivalent while being on ground zero has to have it own gravity pull from sheer size.

Sebastian Pop

He nuked it.

Abhi

Kinda lost to be honest lol. Still nice though.

Phantom knight who can’t think of a better nicknam

First because why not


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