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Chapter 188 The Smith

🕑 Added 2022-04-14 13:24:11 +0000 UTC

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Baba Vader

I'm glad you enjoyed it :) That's a good idea, too. I want to hit that tone, anyway. Also, you probably mistyped something there. The story has taken a bit over a year up to this point not a week.

Baba Vader

Glad you liked it!

Shadeymankey

Love the side chapters. A thought before any big editing push—based on the fact that the entire story has taken place within a week (give or take) of flying for the MC and SO MUCH of the story is more slice of life, you might wanna tone down her NEED to travel. Change the tone to her having some wanderlust, but not have the tone as if it is a vital NEED to explore. She hasn’t explored, she’s fluttered around making friends:)

David Brims

Good side chapters, I'm not usually a fan of POV shifts, but this was very effective and interesting.


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