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Overlord of biblical proportions: Return of the Biblical God (6)

🕑 Added 2025-01-05 02:55:28 +0000 UTC

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NOBADI

My dude, I'm a fan of both your stories and love the plot in each. So please don't take this the wrong way, but every time you write Ainz’s POV, half the chapter feels wasted. About 80% of his already long dialogue is monologue, mostly rambling thoughts, examples, and details that don’t advance the chapter, plot, or even his character. It feels like in-game item flavor text and makes the narrative go in circles. You could skip half his dialogue without missing anything important. I get what you're going for. This style fits Ainz, but you take it to an extreme.


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