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DAY04.SCENE04
🕑 Added 2020-10-05 13:25:03 +0000 UTCJust finished writing another scene. It's kind of reminiscent of an earlier scene, which was troublesome for me. I tried to abbreviate the homework and cooking scene, to have it stay interesting enough to read.
I'm not entirely happy with it yet, and expect to do some more revising on it, maybe expanding on the boy's thoughts a little. The idea is for his sexual desire to be increasing, while not really having an outlet for it.
I'm also trying to show the strained relationship between the boy, girl and the landlords, to build up to the conversation between the boy and the landlord's wife.
The problem for me with this remains the same, it's a day with a lot of setup for the rest of the story, but I'm hoping to keep things interesting enough at the same time.
Let me know if you have any feedback, would love to hear from you. I've also tracked how long it took me to write this scene, I'll be making a post about my general writing process after this, using this scene as an example.
