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🕑 Added 2020-09-01 05:37:24 +0000 UTCA few weeks ago, we had an intense lightning storm, which is very rare here in Northern California. This touched off a series of wildfires, which have blanketed our sky in a smoky haze, darkening the sky even at noon, and filling the nostrils with the scent of burning.
A bit surreal, considered the subject matter I've been working on.
I'm still working on the "special" bubbles. I like this shape a lot better, but I think the gradient fill might be a bridge too far.
Comments
whale
The little one looks to be wearing the same sort of jumpsuit as Fireblade in her training flashback.
Classical Salamander
Superb... I love the special bubbles, the gradient is 'extra'... but it could work.
Arioch
We had some smoke from wildfires last year (or maybe the year before), and there was the smell of smoke visible haze at ground level, but it didn't blot out the sun the way it did last week. 'Twas like the Pellenor Fields under the shadow of Mordor. :D
Arioch
It's mainly that one panel on p.188 that needs a lot of work. Most of the other "rubble" panels are partially obscured by smoke, so I think they only need some touchup.
Olivier GRAVES
This is getting darker at every turn. I like how the pictures' layout is changing compared to the previous pages, from square/right angle to irregular shapes, adding instability and uneasiness to the narration. We are now completely on unstable ground, on the verge of collapsing into insanity.
Bogdan Elizarov
Oh, my! That look on her face! Bellissimo, perfecto!
Earl Tower
Well this takes a dark turn.
Peter S Panov
I think he "gets it" in the bottom right panel of 187.
Dragoongfa
I take it that the 'mounds of burned corpses' are the greatest time sinks right now; would it help, instead of making them 'perfect' to make them 'dreamy'. Some dreams are highly detailed but others may lack in details as long as you don't focus on them. Since this is Alex's POV shouldn't the details emerge when he is focusing on something? I would make the details come out when Alex finally gets it instead of from the very beginning.
COMANDANTE
Reminds me of combine soldiers from half life, they had barcodes on them as well.
Jonathan Werts
I live in the central coast of California, and had to drive my wife north three and a half hours for a medical checkup during the worst of the fires. It was a smoke covered apocalypse when we left home and across the entire 230 mile trip. You're not kidding about darkening the sun, there were a couple of days when I couldn't even tell where the sun was in the sky. Oh, also the new speech bubbles are really excellent. I hope you use something like these for any telepathic communication from here on. I'm looking forward to finding out who it is at the end crouching down, and if one of them is Fireblade. I knew things were rough under the Umiak from some of your descriptions, but this is really stark.
Valdis Trautmanis
Damn.. those bugs sure did a Gulag on those civies, barcodes tattooed on their foreheads and stuff :( Horrible for sure, but fitting touch for the story and setting. Would Alex be "impersonating" Fireblade in this dream?
