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Chapter 301 - Making new friends in unexpected places!

🕑 Added 2023-06-09 03:59:01 +0000 UTC

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Michelle Conover

Lol good way to get us to hydrate, talk about how he can't

Carolyn

So I really enjoy this story- the action scenes are great, I appreciate the tension and how our main character is the right amount OP but it doesnt feel like it, and I feel invested in his success. What could use some work is to introduce some more compelling female characters and more complex, longer, relationships as the story progresses. There are a lot of damsels in distress that Eric saves and then fall in love with him. (Even his sister fits that archetype- she is badass but it is always Eric saving her not the other way around). I personally enjoyed the romance arc (as a counterpoint to some other comments) as it started heading in a more complex direction and the quick flings make sense, but really, really did not like the harem elements with the three women he gave all his stuff to. I know some people like these but I explicitly avoid harem and that almost made me stop reading. That said dont get me wrong - overall, I really enjoy and appreciate this great story! Just some constructive feedback on your female character development.

Antony Haynes

Part of progressing the story is having the main character experience new and different scenarios. When the reader repeatedly sees the same scenario ... it doesn't feel like the story is progressing.

Goldfish2

Man why does Eric gets done dirty like this.


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