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Chapter 388 - Battle For Freetown: Part 10

🕑 Added 2024-01-19 03:59:01 +0000 UTC

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TechMagic

This is something that the author does a lot, the exposition monologue. I’d really rather he found a different way to do it, I would prefer a straight up exposition, rather than having it as part of the dialogue. Here’s another example: “ We’re good, sir. These sweet Mark-IIIs will utterly obliterate any native that thinks he’s hot shit because he can kill a couple raiders. And the vibro-blades will pierce through anything below mithril-tier. Not even polymer reflectives will buy this asshole who thinks he’s hot shit a free pass,” declared the closest of the three after giving his blaster a love tap after finishing his equipment check” I think in reality, a mercenary squad member would say “ we’re good sir” and that would be it. More than that would get a poor reception from a commanding officer, given that they are in a hostile environment

Kitty

So Eric takes time to brag and monologue to the bad guy, instead of wrapping things up quick and going to rescue babies!? After biting the head off of one Merc that was actually still innocent since he was only on his first assignment !!??? And was bragging for his life?? 😐 Not liking this chapter at all.

Okugi

Last sentence in 7th paragraph, "to set homes countless homes ablaze". The first 'homes' should probably be removed, or add commas to emphasize 'homes, countless homes,'.

Mista FOKA

Interesting

Iain Grubb

I'm sorry, how many more mercenery teams and lookiloos are going to come on a contract from a dead man? A few coming before word of the destruction, fair enough... but after over 24 hours?


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