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Chapter 468 - Preparing for what's to come.

🕑 Added 2024-10-21 04:00:05 +0000 UTC

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S_Winter

I have to say that I agree with the lack of goals thing. I'm also a character-driven writer, and sometimes the story goes in different directions than I was expecting because of that. But that's what editing is for - change what happened earlier to better reflect what happens later 😉 On another note....I have to say that I'm considering giving up on this series after this most recent arc. Not a threat, just saying how I feel. And it's not because I don't think it's a good story - it is. But just the amount that the character has lost... Even the 'consolation prize' of pristine spiritual channels has been given up to try to stop Malice from coming back. Which, incidentally, if you have goblin seers realising that their leader isn't entirely gone before Eric can snip the last threads, I will definitely be dropping this series - this such a hard-won victory that I, personally, never want to see Malice as a threat again. Maybe others would disagree, but I'm just telling you what I feel in case you're interested in reader feedback. Right now I feel as bleak as I did in the worst moment of Silver Fox - when all the gods slammed down their cards on poor Alex, the avalanche of shit only stopping when Fox played the Fog of War card. After that, the series definitely improved imo. I'm going to continue for now, hoping that the same improvement will be reflected now - that perhaps enough people will have enough gratitude for his actions that he will actually have more than a handful of helpful people in his corner (people who spend far more time being saved by him and pofiting from him than actually helping him...). Honestly, although I know some people didn't like BunBun, I did - she was the only person who actually helped Eric as much as he helped her, who came through for him when he needed help. As a thought here, heros don't have to be able to do everything by themselves to still be heros. No one's saying that other characters should risk taking over the narrative, but letting the hero be able to lean on someone else every so often only inproves the matter. Incidentally, if those inquisitors come back, I really hope that Eve will step in one way or another. If she can force ascend Yuki and open a gate in Arcadia to protect Richard, she can damn well deal with the corruption in her inquisitors which put him at such risk.

Madzz

YES. THIS. There’s no logic whatsoever in Malice being his father. I feel like it was just thrown in there because it let Malice use bullshit trump cards and scream about how anything Eric earns belongs to him due to non-existent family ties. Maybe a good editor will cut all that out. Sure, let him use his curses and a card or two. Dude is centuries old and all the old ones are hoarders so it makes sense he’d have a card he’s saved for 500+ years. But he certainly can’t twist Eric’s lineage so much that he suddenly counts as his father. It makes zero sense, especially after the goblins spent the last 3 books whining and throwing fits over Eric being a necromancer. They wouldn’t hate it if it were also part of their heritage arts, (it’s not), at most they might hate him for being a better necromancer than they could ever hope to be. None of which has been the case in any of these books. I enjoy the series, truly, but this arc with Malice as Eric’s father has been very frustrating. I’d agree Eric’s “goal” isn’t really a goal. It reminds me of that episode of Rick and Morty where Story Lord kidnaps his author then uses him to generate his “motivation” because he has none of his own to work with, haha.

Eric Morisch

Territory claiming time!

M

Sigh. Malice still doesn’t work as truly being Eric’s father, and are we just meant to forget the setup of he and Elonia being introduced to their real father the night before going into the training pod and eventually being attacked, then why set it up? It read as Aurelia messing with their heads to forget the ‘dinner with daddy’ for some greater purpose, was it instead purely a storytelling flub? Eric feeling guilty about failing in efforts to protect Elly is weird, since he never made any on-page attempts to do so. He literally just walked away, saying ‘see you in Freetown.’ ‘IT’S TIME TO CLEAN UP NEW YORK’ — proceeds to immediately forget about cleaning up New York. This touches upon the central problem of the entire series, and why it so often aimlessly wanders in unsatisfying narrative circles: Stories are driven by characters, and characters without goals means stories that go nowhere. ‘GETTING STRONGER’ isn’t a goal, full stop. There’s no state of ‘get stronger’ that can be successfully achieved. It’s a way of being, a method to use in achieving a goal. This is the root of why readers feel the series is aimless and are frustrated. Eric hasn’t even had a short term goal since wanting to clear his first orange territory before being swept up by Aurelia’s story of achieving Gold - an actual goal that easily overwhelmed the series for quite a while since Eric has no goals of his own.

Trevayne

Interesting, he is spreading out to cover the whole US, or at least to clear the Black, Red, and Orange zones. I wonder what the British and Chinese will make of the reports.


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