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TMLoCL - Chapter 38
🕑 Added 2020-11-17 00:13:35 +0000 UTCI am... not happy with this chapter. I might come back and add more to it before chapter 39. It just... Doesn't seem right. I deviated from my original outline hard, but that isn't unusual for me when writing. But I had an idea and I ran with it and I am not sure if I should have...
That aside, a clarification from the last chapter: When I said Cadence "weakened" herself, that was probably a bad word choice. Rather, Cadence has spent a lot of xp going sideways instead of up in Evolutions. For the amount of xp she has gained her Stats could be far higher right now.
Admittedly, she is a higher quality species now, so she will eventually outperform those other Evolutions, but her Stats are very low compared to other monsters with comparable experience and it is harder for her to gain xp now than it was before.
Also, some people have talked about how week she is as a monster compared to people, and that gets really complicated really fast. The short version is this: Yes, a human can have ten Classes and load up with fighting Classes and have a massive theoretical potential for growth.
But their xp would be split ten ways, they would struggle greatly to actually Level.
But even more than that, Cadence is young. Rei is 131 years old, and the others aren't exactly kids. I haven't assigned ages yet, but Rauvin is an [Officer], he had an army career before becoming an adventurer and would be in his mid thirties. The youngest is Tamlin, and he is somewhere between 16 and 19 years old.
Cadence is one year old.
Finally, I have barely talked about Talents yet, and they are probably the single most important part of this world's society. But we will get to that soon.
Oh wow, that is a long author's note. Sorry!
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Why are Adventurer Guild Masters so bad at politics? Isn’t the answer obvious? A Guild Master has to keep Adventurers in line, so the minimum requirements to become a Guild Master is to be able to put down a C-Rank adventuring team by themselves and to be able to win a fight against most individual B-Rank Adventurers.
Which means that the minimum requirement for a Guild Master is to be an upper B-Rank Adventurer; which means that your average Guild Master is stronger than ninety percent of the entire world.
Which means that when you have a really big hammer, all of your problems start to look like nails.
-S-Rank Aventurer Dre the Massacre, talking to the King of Lam.
Rei’Reihammara Solily POV:
“Wait a second before you head off to meet your team.” The Guild Master Ivano asked me to talk to him after the crowd dispersed, and anything that this man asks is basically a command from heaven. Worse even, because Ivano was far more likely to smite you than the Gods were.
Evergold was a gold mining town sitting on what might very well be the largest and richest gold vein in the entire world. That meant that a lot of people would want to steal that gold for themselves, but it also meant that Kolaro - the country Evergold was situated in - could easily afford to hire the best. Ivano was a man who had a Class beyond Very Rare: the Epic Class, Pyroclast Mage.
The smoke from his pipe hung above his head, occasionally throwing off sparks. Rumor had it that he could kill a person simply by breathing his pipe smoke out on their face. In all out combat he was described as “disastrous,” or “calamitous.”
The former S-Rank Adventurer, Ivano the Apocalypse.
And for some reason, Hewka was mildly annoyed at him. At least, I think it was annoyance; the wyvern clearly wanted him to go away and bother someone else, but she also more clearly had no clue that she was looking at a man who could have roasted that Thunderbird with a casual wave.
“Please, please don’t try and knock his pipe away again,” I whisper to Hewka under my breath, trying to push calm through the bond. “For a creature with an Inspect-style Skill, you would think you’d know not to poke this sleeping Dragobear!”
“It's fine,” Ivano waved his hand and the smoke formed a dome around us, turning the world outside opaque. “As I said, the little gal can’t actually hurt me. It’d be like getting mad at a kid for doing something dumb. They are kids, of course they are going to do something dumb.”
“Thank you for that sir,” I felt some relief, but I was still a little bit wary. No, it was Hewka who was wary; she didn’t know that the smoke was a privacy screen and was nervous about it. I should get her out of here as soon as possible. “How can I help you then?”
“I had to do a pretty bit of magic to hide that gal’s Status,” Ivano admitted and I felt my eyes widen; he could interfere with a Status Check!? “My own fault for doing it in public like an idiot. I suppose it's true what they say: you learn something every day for your whole life and still die a fool. Or I will anyway, an Elf like you will be around a bit longer.”
I swallowed, ignoring his tangents for the moment and asked the obvious next question: “Why did you hide it? What was in Hewka’s Status?”
I needed to calm down. I could feel my anxiety flowing into Hewka, and that just made her more wary and then that wariness flowed back into me, making me more anxious! If I didn’t get a grip soon I’d probably start to panic and Hewka would try and attack a one man disaster. Even now, she was crouching down slightly, bending her legs in preparation to pounce forward.
She paused though when the smoke formed an image of her status again, but this time I noticed that it was longer…
“Cartography… Etiquette… Poetry?” I was surprised to see those Skills and a couple others were on the list now.
“Yeah, she’s smarter than she is letting on,” Ivano chuckled. “Doesn’t speak Common though and doesn’t have the Acting Skill, though I bet she will get it soon.”
“Wait, then is she…? I can’t imagine a Demihuman pretending to be a monster!”
Ivano sighed and then a ripple of magic struck Hewka and myself. Calming magic, clearly, as all my worries just melted away. Hewka calmed down too, with the bond between us becoming still.
“I just went and told everyone she was about as smart as a five year old, yeah?” He spoke as he puffed away on his pipe, the smoke from his mouth went to add to the privacy screen around us. “A monster that becomes a Demihuman retains their Demihuman intelligence when they Evolve into a monster again, but there is a little known extra bit of trivia here. If an intelligent monster Evolves into a Demihuman, they keep their intelligence from before and have to deal with the instincts of whatever body they are in, but if they Evolve again they take both their original intelligence and the Demihuman instincts with them into their new form.”
He took his pipe in his hand and gestured towards Hewka saying, “That wyvern right there? Probably has three different sets of instincts wrestling around inside it, one of which is a Draconoid’s that probably wants to eat us right now.”
I had been aware of that quirk of monster evolution, but I had never really thought about it. I had lived longer than most humans ever would, and even though my development was slower I still had picked up a lot of knowledge over the years. The real question was:
“So what does this all mean?”
“It means the wyvern is probably very intelligent, but can’t use it beyond immediate tasks.” A look of pity crossed his face as he looked at Hewka, “she probably isn’t even entirely sure why she is here or why she does anything. I can’t be sure how intelligent she is, but given the breadth of her Skills I wouldn’t be surprised if there was a person’s level of intelligence locked behind instincts that she cannot understand or control.”
“Now a lot of people have different ideas on what deserves ethical treatment and a lot of people don’t think that monsters - even if they are intelligent - deserve to be treated like people. I am not one of them, so I am going to ask you something:”
“Can you be this girl’s friend? Because I don’t think she is a beast to master, but a person in a difficult place.”
*30 minutes later*
After Ivano had stopped calming us, both Hewka and myself had our emotions slam into us like we had been struck by a giant. Or I did anyway, Hewka seemed oddly unbothered by the event - more curious than anything else - but my mind was thrown into utter chaos. While I had promised to look after Hewka, too much had happened to me today for me to handle it.
For now, we went to check on Tamlin who was at the main Temple Complex. I had to find a way to ask Hewka to wait, but Ivano was right - she was smarter than she was letting on. But I also could tell exactly what he meant by calling her a child trapped in her own head. If I paid attention to our bond I could see exactly how mercurial her emotions were.
Her feelings and desires shifted from moment to moment. Anger to amusement to introspection to annoyance to boredom to curiosity to happiness to confusion; Hewka could barely seem to keep her mind straight. Well, that wasn’t entirely true. I could feel a constant will behind it all, she wanted to be here for some reason but it took all of her Will to keep herself on track.
It… Was not a good idea to leave her by the Temple entrance, but I didn’t have a choice if I wanted to check on Tamlin. I need to know if he would live or die and frankly, I feared the worst. Although Chaurl could heal and was decent with his Alchemy, he was a far cry from a dedicated [Priestess] or [Alchemist]. He might not have been able to do enough to keep Tamlin alive through the journey here…
I tried to keep those worries to myself as I attempted to ask Hewka to wait, but she didn’t even need to be asked. Instead she just plopped down near the temple entrance. I pushed gratitude through the bond and went inside the building.
The main Temple Complex was much the same as it would be anywhere else, just a large hall with alcoves dedicated to various Gods and Goddesses. There were temples to individual deities, but only a larger city would have a temple to every one of them. Evergold has two other temples, one to Marrina the Goddess of Prosperity and Hamel the God of the Underground. Neither of them were very useful for healing, but luckily the main Temple Complex held a few [Priests] of Arlsan, the God of Life.
An [Acolyte] led me back through the temple to the infirmary where Tamlin laid in bed, still unconscious. Yet, he was looking a lot better - to my relief - with a [Priest] on one side of the bed and a [Healer] on the other. He no longer looked like a charred mess, although he hadn’t gotten his hair back.
A separate [Healer] pulled me aside saying, “please don’t disturb them while they are working. I know it is hard to be in the dark about someone you care for, but healing is no easy matter.”
“You are right…” I nodded before saying, “I just had to see if…”
If Tamlin was dead.
“You should get used to it, little Elf.” A stern voice from behind me spoke and the [Healer] stiffened, before hastily fumbling out an excuse and scurrying away. I turned to see an older woman with severe features and short cropped gray hair striding towards me. For all her apparent age, her back was straight, her steps steady and quick, and her eyes bright.
Too bright. The telltale mark of a [Priestess] of Alet, the Goddess of Truth, were their piercingly bright eyes. Even had the older woman not been wearing the robes, her eyes would have been an instant give away as to whom she had pledged her service and soul.
She stepped close to me and started inspecting me closely, her face completely neutral and yet still giving off a critical air of disapproval.
“Ca- Can I help you, Ma’am?” I stuttered, intensely uncomfortable under the scrutiny. It felt like she was peeling back my skin and spirit to study what lay underneath, and I knew that wasn’t actually too far from what was actually happening.
The many Gods and Goddesses granted their followers many different powers and abilities. Every Class has an ability that you are guaranteed to obtain when you take the Class. [Hunters] gained [Prey Sense], [Warriors] gained [Fortitude], and a [Mage] gained [Mana Guard]. [Acolytes] would obtain an ability based on the deity they worshipped. For example, Chaurl, as a worshipper of Jakkus, gained the ability [Ambition is Life] which allowed him to shore up his other Stats with his Willpower. He could survive - for a time - with his Health at zero, refusing to die while he had yet to accomplish his goals, or sprint and fight at zero Stamina, or lift more than his Strength should allow.
An [Acolyte] of Alet would also gain an incredibly powerful ability: [Eyes of Truth]. They could see lies and secrets, even abstract ones like self delusions, half truths, and obfuscation. Given enough time, they could even read the details of a person's secrets without them having to say a word. Nothing could be hidden from them.
But while the Gods grant incredible power, that power also comes with its downsides and restrictions. Chaurl, should his ambition ever falter or his goal seem too petty to Jakkus, would find himself weaker than before as his Skill sapped the very life from his body. If he lost his ambition, Chaurl would almost certainly die.
Alet on the other hand, for all her incredible power, had been cursed by the God of Secrets. She could see the truth, but never speak of it - save to her younger brother, Scalus, the God of Justice. The restriction also applied to her [Acolytes] and [Priestess], but that didn’t make that any less awkward to talk to them.
Who wanted to talk to someone who could ferret out every single thing you have wanted to hide? Of course, nothing made people more suspicious than someone running from a [Priestess] of Alet. After all, what did they need to hide that desperately?
“Hmmmmm,” she continued to look at me without saying anything.
It occurred to me that there was an obvious reason she was here. Ivano had asked me to keep a secret because Adventurers tended to be very wary of intelligent monsters, and I suppose a secret that is held by a Guild Master and former S-Rank Adventurer that might have a life hang in the balance would probably qualify as large enough to attract the [Priestess].
On the other hand, she might be able to help! It would go a long way to making people happy if Hewka could be declared safe by a [Priestess] of Alet! So I started to explain the situation and asked the [Priestess] to come with me and see Hewka.
Fortunately, Hewka had not wandered off while I was inside, she just seemed to be… humming? I turned to introduce Hewka to the [Priestess] and immediately knew something was wrong. The [Priestess] had stopped dead, staring at Hewka. A few seconds later, she started shaking and blood started to leak out from her glowing eyes before collapsing!
I slammed the door to the Temple back open, calling for another [Priest] or [Healer] as utter confusion poured through the bond.
Comments
DraconianGreed
Huh so Cadence hasn’t already achieved Lovecraftian/Cthulhu levels of eldritchness in her soul...
Senjo
Yup, I agree, some chapters are massive info dumps and basically nothing happens, while others move too quickly and skip over a bunch of stuff.
Deinos
Hah way to make an entrance, let the damsels faint in droves. I liked the explanation about her instincts stunting her thinking, even if that didn't come exactly through in the first person pov. But I know it'd be hard to do so without becoming boring.
Zackman2k12
That actually makes sense\
Keifru
Thats...not the point I was harping on? Alt-PoV for how outsiders perceive events can be nice. But exposition straight at the audience is rough on 'suspension of disbelief' and comes at the cost of immersion of a living, breathing world. Granted, tackling this problem successfully is a thing a standard isekai mucks up most of the time, nevermind a multi. Usually its lampshaded by having the PoV char be very young and theyre in a school of some sort. That gives ample justification to dictate straight at the audience because the character is learning this for the first time too. Also something in urban fantasies if someone falls past the masquerade or somesuch (Hell, the Harry Potter series in a nutshell)
Osprey36
So normally I would agree with you in that a story should follow the main character mostly and have asides for extra context. In this current arc however I don't think that would work well since Cadence doesn't know any of the context that anything is happening in. Like with the priest just now, all she knows is someone came out, looked at her, and then literally dropped dead. She wouldn't know the importance of such a thing in the slightest. Add this onto the fact she doesn't know the language yet and she's running around pretty much blind.
Toasty
Even if she looks at sb who is over a hundred years old, considering that hrr ability only lets her know of the secrets of a person, the actual amount of information should be just a small fraction of the total life experience. In Cadence's case her whole past lifes should be considered secrets, which mean a huge amount of information that just got crammed in the poor pristesses head :D
Chymor
What I don't like about this chapter is how much of an info dump it is. Rei knows all about the priestess, the S-rank adventurer etc and we get it as boring summaries in her head. The action itself is kinda fun, but it's hidden in info dumps to explain their society. Can we not learn this slower as Cadence learns it?
Jonathan Timm
Imagine being forced to relive all of her past lives in an instant
Claus Jørgensen
and she gets missing linbs and organs back too :P
Claus Jørgensen
the elf is like 131 and we have no idea what and how much she gets from her ability.
Solarlancer
she saw the truth about cadence and well it's not the kind of knowledge that a mortal should have
Sean Wilner
To be clear, I'm not talking about the teasers/lectures at the start of each chapter. Those are excellent for world building and don't really "give away the farm" when it comes to system specifics since they reflect the common knowledge of denizens of the world Cadence is in.
Sean Wilner
I was a big fan of this chapter! The only thing I implore you to do is to cut back on the exposition of the author notes for world building. We can learn about the system and circumstances governing each life at the same time and pace that Cadence does. From a practical standpoint, it's harder to write yourself into a corner when you leave the specifics more ambiguous anyways!
foldedcorners
I'm really liking the PoV swap. Cadence is fun on all, but her life this time around has been frankly.. ridiculous. From a frog to a wyvren is an odd circumstance. This world seems like it's going to have a heavily religion/god influence, so I doubt Cadence can stay anonymous from this world's pantheon for long. Luckily it looks like the god of truth won't be able to spill her secrets anyways :P That's a fun twist of fate
K Hilliard
Way to drop a truth bomb on the priestess.
Keifru
I do have one concern, is that with it being a lot of short stories/viginettes with the nature of her mercurial lives, the 'expositing at the audience from the mind of a character' can feel rough. Since the worlds change, and the circumstances/[Systems]/cultures vary wildly, I can very well see it possibly being an energy/word sink that could get repetitous. IE "Okay now we have to take the time to talk about how the gods interact in this other world for a few paragraphs". All that being said, I'm still quite enjoying the ride. I hope my rambling makes sense/is useful- I'm a shite writer so all I can do is consume and ponder.
Kyle
Great chapter. I don’t see anything wrong with it in the immediate sense. Is this making future chapters harder to map out?
Nimps
4 days to get to full health just by doing nothing and not even taking into account her healing from eating is FAST and awesome!
Nimps
I like the chapter too. What was it that you were concerned about? Although I am not a fan of multiple alternate POV chapters I do like the occasional one as it shows a different perspective if that's what you were concerned about? Also thanks for clarifying what you meant by she weakened herself, I was confused as to why you would say that now that she had access to greater bloodlines so to speak. I think the investment is worthwhile if she can live long enough she should evolve into something very very powerful. Plus some of those basic traits from early on can make a massive difference late game. Like the healing one, 1% is 1% no matter how much health you have, and if an evolution grants the same trait depending on what you decide, it may or may not combine into a stronger version. Up to how your system works with duplicates I guess.
Jeff091
thanks
reji
Probably just mundane data overload: Cadence lived more than one life, and so know more than your ordinary specimen secrets. As royal, as servant of noble, as earth-based human (tech), as someone lived through few Systems, as reincarnator, as friend of Podi.
reji
She broke the priest, lol. It's fun. Left chapter as it is, chapter is better than average
lala jhones
So Cadance can tell people about her ability to reincarnate, but whatever the priestess saw was probably past the okay zone for "Podi."
Osprey36
Thanks for the chapter, I don't think there's any inherent problem with the chapter though. It gives a bit of insight into the gods of this life, and also hints that Cadence is outside if the purview of these gods if that priest's reaction was anything to go by. At least that's what I think, it could also be something like in the Indiana Jones and the Crystal Skull where the Russian woman fries her brain from too much information.
Nim
Not sure what you don't like about it, but I like this direction, actually!
Alphafenrir401
YOU CAN'T HANDLE THE TRUTH
Ethan Norton
I don’t see anything wrong sith it tbh
Kevin Caffrey
Local deities can’t handle a small glimpse of Podi
Zackman2k12
Thank you!
Lee Singleton
thanks for the chapter, the problem always seem to be that it over too soon :-)
Patrick S.
Thanks for the chapter 😊
