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Changelog for the last while
🕑 Added 2024-12-15 05:47:51 +0000 UTCSo as you may know, I edit the chapters twice. Once before posting here, and once again before posting publicly. The 7 weeks between posted chapters is a huge palate cleanser and helps me make the chapters even better. I do post the edited versions here, (though the discord maintains the old versions) but I imagine not everyone is keen on rereading the stories as the public chapters come out. So here's a changelog in celebration of me editing CH 100. Here's the changelog for like, literally 5 months.
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I rewrote CH 47's "Sakura Vs Neji" altercation to flow a little better, and feel a little more natural. I'm still not super happy with it, but it'll do. He's 13, it's not gonna feel great.
Edited CH 48 to be more natural and fix quite a few first draft typos.
CH 49 has been heavily edited to reduce a ton of typos, and the Party Level scaled with Lee has been fixed to represent the number it was supposed to be, 40.
Chapter 50 got some minor edits, nothing important. Maybe 100 more words of description and better worded sentence structure.
Chapter 51 had a big edit, when Sakura hands the ammo box to Tenten she explains that these bullets won't work in her gun. There's also some added description and better wordings and fixed sentences. It added an extra 200 words I think.
Chapter 52's edits were incredibly small, mostly just some odd wordings fixed and a little more context to certain parts. It got about 100 words.
CH 53 got 1000 words added to it. Two entire scenes are added, in which Tenten gets the Shotgun, and then they talk about the logistics of the weapon. It's probably the first edit that makes a chapter worth rereading. Luckily there's a collection, so you can go find it quickly. It'll also be on SV and SB in a few minutes so, you know, could just reread it there if you feel like it.
Chapter 54 got probably 200 words added. Some better wordings, better description, and I added a small piece about Fierro's motivations at the end so it works better.
Chapter 55 Added some words, changed some descriptions and made wordings clearer. I changed the relationships to reflect the story a little better, especially Tenten gaining points for the shotgun. Previously that wasn't a thing, so her relationship points were worse. They also find rifle ammo now, hinting at Tenten's future prize.
Chapter 56 got some minor edits, it really didn't change much.e
Chapter 57 was edited for clarity, quite a few of the paragraphs were rather confusing. Like I wasn't even sure what was happening on reread, so I fixed that. The edits ended up adding about 300 words.
Chapter 58 just received some very simple description fixes and wording fixups. Only about an extra 100 words, nothing noticeable or worth a reread.
Ch 59 Changed some flavortext at the start of the chapter, mostly just fixed up some wordings and made the description a little clearer. Added a few hundred words.
Ch 60 changed a lot of flavortext, especially in the fight scene and Sakura's reflection on what happened. The most significant difference was Sakura choosing to give Noblesse Oblige to Sasuke instead of Tenten, since Tenten is getting a second loot here very soon. I also edited Neji's reaction to be more intense without adding much more detail, I think it works better.
CH 61 got about 300 extra words. I fixed up a lot of wordings to feel better, and flow better. This did make Miel, Gita, and Luminella's bit substantially larger though so if you weren't a fan of that segment I wouldn't bother. I liked it.
CH 62 Tenten got her rifle as a drop, which is a huge change. Otherwise, I mostly just improved the details and description and moment to moment flow of text.
CH 63 Fixed up a lot of wordings, made the scene flow better, fixed a little logistics and altered the reaction to Tenten pulling out her looted rifle. It's maybe 100 words larger.
CH 64 got incredibly minor touch ups to wording and grammar.
Ch 65 got a touch up on wordings and making things more clear, especially during the Ino and Kakashi moment.
Ch 66 got an extra couple hundred words, mostly around making paragraphs make more sense. I could really feel the 'I wrote this under stress' in its wordings and that needed cleaning. Nothing significant changed.
CH 67 Fixed up some wordings, changed a little dialogue, mostly just clarified description and added 100 words.
Ch 68 Fixed up some wordings, especially in Tenten's dialogue. She was a bit, odd. The edits were small, and mostly just helped readability.
Ch 69 - Nice - Fixed up a lot of wordings, especially during the fight. I think I added like 200 words, it was really poor at times
Ch 70 Did a ton of edits, honestly massive. Same chapter, through and through, but so many wordings were made slightly better. Got a weird reaction on the public places though, maybe I humanized Fierro too well? Go me I guess.
CH 71 Really fixed like two lines, nothing big.
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At about this point I fell into a deep depression and the edits became a lot less significant for kind of a while and I stopped taking the change log. So unless specifically stated below, you can assume the change was some verbiage or description or at the very least, not that memorable for me.
CH 77: I fixed a bunch of stat issues, the things were displayed wrong and I'm not sure why. I also significantly changed descriptions, and I do believe I even changed the way the mental attack happened and Ino's gifted items. This chapter is probably worth rereading.
CH 78: A hundred words or so of description but largely all I did was make it clearer that they're not in Sakura's mind.
CH 79: I fixed up the Kakashi conversation a little. It might be worth rereading if you thought that convo felt weird.
CH 80: Some of her skills got changed to to an earlier mess-up with a side story. Not important unless you really care about the system.
CH 85: It was description but the change to the tone of the pool they walked through was drastically changed. It might be worth a reread if that scene felt empty to you.
CH 87: The tone of Ino's breakdown was mildly touched, might be worth a reread if you really like Ino in this.
CH 89: Technically nothing plot wise was changed, but in the initial version of this chapter the system teases her with death if she doesn't talk to her family. This was always intended as a joke, but upon rereading I realized it looked way more like the system taking her hostage which is a shitty theme I don't like. I fixed it to be more clear the system was fucking with her.
CH 92: I made it clear that Sakura was pushing mana in her summon to maintain it in the desert, and also made it clear that this is necessary. Previously Mana wasn't even mentioned until significantly later, which was bad writing given how important it is.
CH 93: At this point I started my new meds and the depression spiral ended. The chapters are on average an extra 200 words larger after this. This chapter was pretty much pure description changes, but it's important. There was also a drastic change to the way the sand interacting with blood is described, as people on SV found it unscientific and weird. I fixed it, but for most people it won't matter.
CH 94: Sakura's a little more vivid with her description, setting the tone of Naruto's reaction a little better. Mostly just better description.
CH 96: A significant expansion was given to Sakura interacting with Wave, and I even fixed an inconsistency about the statue. It has a mustache damn-it. Maybe worth a reread.
Ch 97: Significant changes were made to Temari's segment of this chapter, might be worth rereading the first half if you care about her perspective.
CH 98: Significant description was changed in general, I think this one grew by like 600 words. I also changed Sakura's reaction to pain throughout the chapter, as that was a plot hole. She has an ability to negate pain while in combat, and how that functions was clarified. 100% worth a reread.
CH 100: Wordings were fixed that made the Ino part awkward. Wordings in the Hokage discussion were fixed to be a little less awkward. A plot hole where Sakura says she doesn't know who Anko is was fixed, as it's later shown that she knows Anko quite well. I should do a side story where they hang out.
Comments
Dopplerdee
Neat, good work.
