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Chapter 18, part 2

🕑 Added 2024-12-25 13:21:42 +0000 UTC

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Fuyge

Really like this. The two really vibe with each other. Also think some time alone can only be a good thing.

The Dave

I really hesitated on the kiss, it originally wasn't in, but beta argued that scene as written read as if building to a kiss, so wrote that in. I'm mostly sold on it being in there (no comments on whether a romantic relationship will actually happen down the line). I'm not seeing any real pushback on the decision for now, but all of this to say that I do understand catching you off guard with it.

TempestK

*blink* Okay then, was _not_ expecting the kiss there, but given her personality I can see it having kind of developed with a, heh, slow burn. Ran not being the most emotionally perceptive guy being oblivious to it makes sense. I hope that Ran at least contacts Grady to let him know about what's happening. Perhaps he'll be able to catch up to Ran. Looking forward to seeing the personality of the Nidoran♂ that Ran ends up catching; unless he gets blindsided by something else like the situation with Skorupi, like an egg for a Skrelp or something that washed up on shore thanks to strange currents.

The Dave

Grady's fight isn't due for a while yet. Kid's scared to face his sponsor/mentor/idol.

MaliMi

Why does not he wait and watch Grady's fight? The conversation with Jossie was well done.

DiscoT

I like this direction a lot! He needs his own space to grow further and I completely understand the wish to not resent each other because of a one-sided success.

The Dave

Well, this won't be contentious at all... I do welcome all input on this one, the decision to split Josie off is set in stone and makes perfect sense within the listed motivations, as far as I'm concerned, but of course the exact manner of their goodbye is something I went back and forth on for a bit. Ultimately, my beta swayed me towards the current path, but I don't expect a consensus agreement on it being the right call. I am open to debate and discussion, but please keep it mellow. That said, I wish you all a very Merry Christmas! It is genuinely a coincidence that this update of all things has ended up on this specific day, but I do think there's some nice incidental symbolism there. Keep an eye out, I'm late on my commitments for November and December, but barring holiday duties today and tomorrow, I have a few completely free days coming up which will be solely dedicated to writing and catching up on things. Finally, thank you all for reading and for your support, it means the world to me.


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