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Volume 1 - page 18
🕑 Added 2021-05-16 23:06:52 +0000 UTCAuthor's Note
It's really important to me that the dialogue in Mothorial flows as naturally as possible. This can be a challenge with space limitations, but it also presents a fun opportunity to learn how to balance effective dialogue with efficient storytelling. Some pages end up having as much as 25% to 30% of their dialogue cut and combined and tweaked to fit the space, then rewritten a third time to flow properly. Webcomics, amiright?
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TRANSCRIPT
AVA: ...Fine, I'll do it. But only 'cause you're a real friend. I don't know what Vex told you, but-
RAIONA: We were hanging out in a red flower field. Try checking there first. I'll see you 'round.
RAIONA: ...Alright, I did it. But I really don't feel good about this, guys.
CORI: She bought it, right?
RAIONA: Yeah, but-
CORI: It's just a prank, Rai. That jerk needs to learn her lesson. After this we'll leave her alone, okay?
RAIONA: Can't you let this go? It's not worth it.
VEX: Maybe not to you.
Comments
River 'Neon Noble' Nicolosi
Oh no D:
William Kennard
Geeezus thoes guys are butts....
