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The Hive Rider Gang Redux + Intermission
🕑 Added 2024-02-24 16:26:37 +0000 UTCThis redux contain minor and major rewrite from chapter 1 to chapter 6 so the flow of story stayed consistent. Chapter 4 (Singed + Mother Lena) probably had the most amount of rewrite with me adjusting their transformation.
And for the intermission, It was a place for me to write about other hive lord. Intermission 1 contain a backstory not only for one, but two other hivelord. Content warning, it contain religious play and stereotype of Muslim.
In total, this whole document amount to around 31000 words. There is table of content to jump up directly to the chapter you want to read.
For next update, I will back to focus on The New Coach
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Commodore
I like the rewrite. It feels more like competing hive lords on even ground than it did previously
