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Chapter 36: Elidranthia Part 2

🕑 Added 2023-12-01 18:23:57 +0000 UTC

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Charles Owens

The first part seems good but it feels a bit discordant with the second half. I think mixing an emotional flashback and a history lesson in the same chapter wasn't a good idea. Maybe have a slice of life second section instead to show how that dream affected her throughout the day or her interactions with others.

laulau20

This one should be in the first Elidranthia meeting back in chapter 20. what do you guys think?


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