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Spoilers - Away from Home
🕑 Added 2023-05-15 23:02:34 +0000 UTCSpoilers Ahead!
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So chapter 11 is going have Cassie's friend drop Cassie off at Scott's apartment for a weekend long visit. And because hanging out at Scott's gives Cassie the freedom to fly around, free of the wheelchair she's been temporarily stuck in, Cassie extends her stay from a few days, to a few weeks, and then stays permanently after her casts are off.
Anyhow, I've just started writing and posing chapter 14 and I want to do a 4-5 week time jump to after Cassie's casts being removed.
But I also want to have this chapter be the one where Scott meets Cassie's parents for the first time.
The thing is, since Cassie is going to be stuck in a wheelchair for about 4 weeks, this isn't a situation where she can easily wheel herself home on her own for a visit every few days. Ideally someone would tag along to help her travel in her wheelchair back and forth. Meaning that Scott, Rob, a friend of Cassie, and Cassie's parents would be taking turns with helping Cassie.
So if chapter 14 is the first time Scott meets Cassie's parents, that means neither Scott nor Cassie's parents have yet wheeled Cassie back home for a month, which feels like a long time, particularly if they live in the same city and are just a subway ride away from each other.
I mean, in that four week period of Cassie essentially having moved in with Scott, wouldn't have she gone home at some point for more clothes, or had her parents over for a visit?
Am I overthinking this? I think it was more than month until my parents met my partner when we first started dating, but then I was living 2 hours away, not living at home, and hadn't broken three of my limbs.
So while I like the time skip, because it lets me show Cassie out of her wheelchair, and would have Scott 4 weeks more experienced with his Scarlett form, I feel like I should change the time skip to just a week, meaning Cassie would still be stuck in her wheelchair, and Scott's Scarlett wouldn't be as different as I show her in these preview images.
Other option would be to throw in a line that Cassie did go home for a day or two a week into her visit, and that it was Rob or a friend who picked her up from Scott's (I mean, she could also have taken a taxi, but that seems expensive for someone who is unemployed and lives at home with her parents).
Thoughts?
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From the Files of Robin Harper
Yeah, I think I figured it out. The problem was that I had just created eight panels that I really liked to start the chapter, and then realized that it didn't work. I really wanted to find a way to save those panels, but the truth is that the best course was to simply toss those panels.
The move-in feels to me to be more unplanned and just sort of happened so I don't think it's entirely unrealistic that meeting the parents wasn't high on the list. Throw in the excitement of having someone to share her powers with and it would be pretty down the list. If you need a reason to delay, in don't think it's outside of Scott's personality to be nervous about taking that step. Could be as simple as Cassie suggests they meet the parents and scott comes up the excuse of the wheelchair to delay. You could even use that as a source for some worry/tension as Cassie gers closer to dropping the wheelchair. Just a few thoughts but as Zoe said, just go with what feels right and natural to you π
Zoe Storm
Speaking as a writer, there are some things that will feel not quite right to you, but which readers won't even notice. And the opposite is true too: you'll put in a tiny detail that doesn't mean anything much, and readers will latch onto it. What I mean is: don't overthink this. Just write what feels right to you π
