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Updated Working Documents (Major Spoilers)
🕑 Added 2018-11-01 23:11:19 +0000 UTC> > Link to Documentation v1.5 < <
Here's the latest story documentation, which shows what we have in store for you in parts of the game yet to come! If you haven't checked it out before, beware that there are major spoilers inside.
For those of you who have already perused this document, it's been updated with our most recent drafts of Marion's and Jessie's final chapters, as well current iterations of characters and our present approach to deeper overarching events. Feel free to take a look, and if you want to discuss anything therein, comment below or in Discord's #spoilers_story_discussion channel!
We've tried not to spoil all the secrets in here, but there's plenty to whet your appetites. Thank you so much for your support, and hope you enjoy the sneak peek!
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Little Napoleon
Thanks so much for all the feedback, SUS28! I'll send some more info along in DM's about the points you've made here!
ccateni
Ok, heres some more feedback. 1. I just realized a missed opportunity in chapter 4 of having Effie in the chapter via the bunny, like maybe have her shift from her bunny form to anthro/human form maybe to help Malcolm and Jessie. It wouldn't make since not to have an important character like her. 2. I get having sad endings, but Grace Ending 3 seems unneeded. The ending doesn't really fit the rest of the game in tone, and it would be better to replace it with something else (example: Years later, Malcolm is sailing on the sea trying to get home, and he falls off the ship only to be saved by Grace and the two go home). 3. Owen should have a redeemed arc, it would suck not to have it considering we know Owen is a good person at heart considering what we know of him so far during Marion's story Side note: What will happen to the sisters in the Fae Arcs? Are they just gonna disappear? If there's anymore, I'll let you both now.
ccateni
Ok... Just got done with reading the updated stuff, here's what I got. 1. Loved some of the updates with Grace's story, the [something to do with Malcolm] in one of the endings was smart. Not digging the extended TF and wish it were an option instead of a forced choice to continue with Grace's TF. It still bugs me. 2. The new opening for Jessie chapter 4 does fix some of the issues with the original abrupt opening. However, the way its written feels abrupt and I hope there's still a TF in between because it feels like something is missing and not just in the story, but also in opportunity as well. 3. Can there be an option to have the potion not work similarly to the original script for Jessie Chapter 4. I personally preferred that instead of having it cured because then I'm wondering why Alana didn't bring it up in the other paths (having it not work maybe because Alana wanted Jessie to still have it because she knows her well for example and used it to get her back to her normal form without the dress). I'll post some more feedback when I get back, but I do like a lot of the changes so far.
