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Masaki The Devourer II - Page 59
🕑 Added 2023-05-26 11:31:47 +0000 UTCNEED FEEDBACK PLEASE!
So i guess it's no secret that I change the dialogue on these pages a lot of times right before I post. SO originally the top panel was just going to be Rinari and Masaki talking about how good the pizza is and talking about the video game. Nothing of substance, just showing them hanging out.
SO the sex talk that Rinari gives Masaki is a bit of a last minute decision, but I think it will serve the overall story better. Rinari's know it all attitude to put a little confusion in Masaki's head over how her relationship with Rin and Norah may be more complicated than she expected. Plus I think it's kind of funny to hear Rinari's highly accurate sex education talk.
Anyways. As I often do, I left the word balloons off in case I need to edit the words later. If you guys notice any inconsistencies let me know in the comments
Comments
GagaLadyLover
maybe she can do both?
Phatelot
I get you! And thanks, always a pleasure to talk with you :)
GagaLadyLover
I honestly did think about that. I know it's a few different dialogue styles to navigate and I kind of decide in the moment which way they are going to speak. Also in the flashbacks I quite putting the brackets on the dialogue. I did think about that for this page specifically. I know in the reality of the way humans talk, two people revert to their native dialogue if they are both comfortable, but yeah, the specific reason for this being in their broken english is I thought it would be more entertaining when they so wrongfully discussed what human sex is. hahaha Thanks for the comment and notes Phatelot. I've missed you buddy.
Phatelot
The only inconsistency I can see is that Rinari and Masaki aren't speaking in their native language when they're not talking with humans. But on the other hand if they did we wouldn't be blessed with words like "educake" so I don't really mind. I mind that Rinari isn't going to metabolize all these calories into fat though. My only hope is that her alien body reacts differently to the pills than how a human body does!
M4773n
Rinari will either explode or shrink down.
Volcom25
They should make some big belly beds based off your characters I would get the Norah and Masaki ones for sure
GagaLadyLover
Yeah I'm about to have to buy a new mattress myself. I'm looking at one of those mail order foam ones. But I wish I could get a big belly girl bed :(
GagaLadyLover
Rinari has little self control. If she sees something she likes she takes it. She may be taking virginities soon enough :0
UltraSpinkie
Rinari strikes me as someone who acts like she knows what sex entails despite her complete lack of knowledge about it. But would easily become addicted to it should she experience it for the first time.
Volcom25
I like the dialogue the conversation between Rinari and Masaki is pretty funny and it works, it’s very on character for Rinari. Also, loving all of their bellies, I like Rinari’s belly bed it’s so big and soft looking I’d take her up on her offer to use it as a bed lol. I wonder what’s about to happen to Rinari now that she ate all those pills xD
