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A Sodlier's Life - 139 - The Wight Problem

🕑 Added 2024-02-08 03:06:55 +0000 UTC

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Fortunis

Not to mention the fucking summoner is specifically targeting him in particular lol

robert devoe

We had only found seven spectators so far today specters

SodaBoBomb

What IS it with this genre commenters? They always want MC to do the purely selfish, and usually long term stupid thing. "He's in a prime spot to run" on what planet is that a good idea? First of all, snow. Second, no plan. Third, boring. Fourth, just leave all the people he knows?

SodaBoBomb

Adrian doesn't have a Praetorian backer.

Thundermike00

The thing is he can’t escape since that elven mage wants him dead. With no one to help he will constantly be chased by that old fox

Alexander Belousov

I thought the writing was fine from that point of view. It is all very "realistic" --> break a door, get a dust cloud, get an enemy attacking through dust cloud; weaponsmith is also a good place to find a runic blade. So ... seems all reasonable? It only feels a bit abrupt. The thing is, battles are abrupt. Maybe add a comment to MC thinking that "everything happened too fast" and reflecting on it? For closure. Just a thought. /shrug

Erick Thiemke

open to suggestions to make the flow better...maybe change it to more of a surprise attack by the wight? The writing indicated Delmar and Konstantin were anxious to loot the forge. The dust cloud was unexpected, as was the wight. I wanted two things from the chapter - one, that Konstantin was not perfect, and two, it was a chance for the MC to move up in the company.

Fabian

Rushing in to me felt constructed. Why would you rush into zero visibility? Its like let's pretend the moment of surprise matters like against humans. In all other cases the legionnaires pulled back when there was danger from specters, now suddenly 180° turn because someone has to die leaves a bad taste in my mouth. Deaths are fine. Just make sense please.

Blorcyn

Delmar needed help, and at least to my mind, Konstantin’s addiction meant he was more determined to kill the Wight with his blade rather than help Delmar. He lost his objectivity.

Erick Thiemke

corrected!

Erick Thiemke

got this one

Erick Thiemke

fixed this

Silver Beard

He's in a prime spot to run... distant to any major city. Take Ginger and just go hard for a few weeks

Silver Beard

His space capacity is out. I don't see how the Pratoreon guard let's him live beyond this unless he's oath-bound to one of them. That's just how it appears to be in Author's world. Nobody with real potential can be allowed to roam free without a leash. I'm not saying run... but it needs to be his new focus...

Silver Beard

I'm thinking back to when Eryk go assigned to this group that there was a big turn over b/c Castille always took on the big fish- the hardest missions, etc. Why is it now suddenly noteworthy that folks are dying?! Roll with it and move on. That said there could have been a couple pratorean watch dogs that need to die (before he runs)...

Silver Beard

I thought Konstantian was trying to out him too. But we know the collector won't do anything with undead- that's already been established.

Silver Beard

Death was coming to some regardless. I don't think that's a point of contention. I'd've rather Konstantian and Adrain were first (pratorean backers), but anyone is going to be a blow given the size of the company. As it is- pick up and move on. Grieve later. Solider's life.

Erick Thiemke

Yes he is going to take Delmar’s place. It was supposed to be a surprise death due to Konstantins pressing to kill specters

Faa Diallo

Didn't see it coming honestly. Did something happen before that foreshadowed this? Is it cause Eryk needs to move into Castile's inner circle?

Faa Diallo

Spectators -> Specters

Faa Diallo

Adiran -> Adrian

Erick Thiemke

Oops, yeah should be kettle

Da Worst John

10/10 on the chapter title

rizen

> Eryk! Use the collecter! do you mean the kettle here? or is konstantine intentionally outing Eryk about his hidden collector from sebastian's brother back in the swamp?

Erick Thiemke

chap 140 and 141 are coming in the next two days - and so is the Shimmering Labyrinth

Erick Thiemke

well, this chapter might have some controversial deaths. give me feedback. as the early readers you have a chance to change the direction a little of the story. not sure if you saw this death coming

Erick Thiemke

OMG - there are 4 new Seraphim members today?


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