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A Soldier's Life - 165 -

🕑 Added 2024-03-21 06:20:49 +0000 UTC

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Karnnie

It is not bone, but it is cartilage and connective tissue. I simply assumed that the Runic weapons had no issue cutting through it. For the hunters out there that read this, it would be a nice tidbit to throw out there.

Erick Thiemke

i should remember this when the read edit for the chpater to go from here to royal road. Maveith would certainly be aware of the shoulder plate. i read a little a few minutes ago on a google search

Karnnie

Be careful with the boars. When hunting boars, all hunters know of the "shoulder Plate" sometimes called a shield or armor plate. It is not actually a piece of armor, it is a thickened and hardened layer of tissue made of fat, connective tissue and cartilage and can be more than an inch in thickness and that is on a normal EARTH boar. It will stop arrows as well as bullets. I assume that because they are using magic/runic weapons that this is a non issue but you should still be aware that this is there and it is a defensive point meant to protect the boars from other males and their tusks during mating season. I would assume that these horse sized boars have a much bigger and thicker plate. Normal (earth) Wild Boars can weigh upwards of 800 (some have claimed 1000, and the world record is 2500 but that one was bred in captivity.) pounds can be up to 8 feet long and stand nearly 4 foot in height depending on the region you find them in, and that is just in the United States. Now those are of course not the norm, anything over 700 is considered a monster but being as big as a horse, I would assume closer to 2000 - 2500 pounds in weight.

BrycenBeans

Maveith when he would get 100% of the effects. I'm not saying to not give anything its just weird how greedy he is. then just gives two apexes like nothing....

BrycenBeans

confused why he keeps giving the apexs to

Tillman Holloway

He should, he's trying to force a bond and is doing it by making Eryk into a noodle, instead of just letting her stay a reluctant ally

Adunn

Author please don’t think all readers think like this guy lol.

Tillman Holloway

I'm getting tired of him turning into a simp whenever Raelia is involved he can't even maintain a backbone for 10 minutes when she's involved.

Tillman Holloway

Why? She's a nobody and he still might end up killing her

Adunn

Man he’s really greedy. He should give her ring back and split the loot more evenly and heck give her the griffin egg as well.

Lobotomized Philosopher

It flows better now, appreciate the care you give for feedback.

Erick Thiemke

I rewrote the chapter - tried to add some more info about the state of mind of the characters

Erick Thiemke

I will rewrite it tomorrow. Need to read it with fresh eyes and a clear mind. Just finished 166

Lobotomized Philosopher

Yes your intentions are fine, like I said I just think the transition is wonky. I feel you need one or two more connecting sentences to smooth it over between “Realia was smiling” and “I decided to put her in her place” Like: “Seeing her smiling and full of herself after almost getting us killed set my blood boiling, and I immediately decided to put her in her place.” Etc Etc

Prinny Knight

secret quest unlocked: The Proposal

Mason W

This is still my favorite web series. Every chapter moves the narrative and develops people.

Lemes

As someone who doesn't have English as their first language I can sympathize with Raelia. Some swear words in English sound very strange in Portuguese. Thanks for the chapter

Erick Thiemke

there will be a POV with Raelia as the epilogue of this book but i will try to clean this interaction up

Erick Thiemke

I was trying to show Raelia hadnt changed - going off and doing her own thing in battle. kind of an epiphany for her on how she got Moonclaw killed

Lobotomized Philosopher

I feel like it needs more connecting/descriptive sentences I think between Raelia smiling and Erik being angry, and maybe one sentence extra for Maveith too. Just my thoughts on it tho, the rest of the chapter is good.

Lobotomized Philosopher

This whole section feels a little wonky ngl: Raelia smiled as she went to retrieve her weapons. I decided to put her in her place, “That was a stupid plan, hiding in the open. What if the boar trampled over you? And you didn’t tell us you were doing it! We thought you ran away!” A shocked look came on her face at being yelled at. But instead of defending herself or yelling back like I expected, she just squeaked out softly, “I’m sorry.” Her response was so unexpected I was caught off guard. I gave her my angriest stare and waited for Maveith to intercede and defend her , but he didn’t. His deep voice sounded, “Raelia, I am disappointed in you too.” It was like Maveith had slapped her as she stumbled. She looked down, no longer able to make eye contact. Was she going to cry? I relaxed, “You looked like a badass doing it, but if this is going to work, we need to communicate. Maveith, Raelia will help you harvest the boars. Make sure she does most of the work. I am going to search the rest of the chamber.”

Silver Beard

So Legion hand sign- I don't ever remember that coming up. How to coordinate an attack on a beast that really requires the whole company...

Silver Beard

Time to give her the oblivion pills and stash her away. Surprised the current state of things never came up but then she'd have to face her latest failure.

Silver Beard

Just give her the egg in storage...if she's bonded a new when she returns she might be allowed to rejoin her corps.

Blorcyn

Heyyyy. Another of the Legionnaires. I get why he’s frustrated with the elf and he’s doing the Castille style of management. The moonclaw reference reminded me though, he’s going to need to properly and abashedly apologise for his role in Moonclaw the Griffin’s death. Yes it was war, but it was still her animal. Imagine someone who killed your dog. There’s no way past that.

Erick Thiemke

late chapter. 1st of 4 for this cycle. should be another one tonight


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