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A Soldier's Life - 224 - Rat Problems (major edit 3-18-25, +1100 words)

🕑 Added 2024-07-04 16:00:38 +0000 UTC

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Joey Regan

Spellcheck fix: “He has just tried to roast me and was complaining?” Has to had

Bananaboat

Thanks, i remember him harboring suspicions that some pups were working for first citizens so this didn't seem too wildy different.

Erick Thiemke

Castian never tried to get the amulet in the original - I wanted a little more animosity for the MC in regard to the Hounds and First Citizens.

Fullblack

Same. I seem to remember everything written here.

Bananaboat

I can't tell what the significant impact to the story is with this edit as opposed to the previous, what exactly has changed?

Joey Regan

I enjoyed the additions in this edit!

NovaZero

confused me trail > my

NovaZero

"it slammed into him to the ground" > "it slammed him into the ground", or "it slammed him to the ground"

Erick Thiemke

corrected

Erick Thiemke

corrected

Mason Benoit

Thx

Erick Thiemke

corrected

Erick Thiemke

corrected

Erick Thiemke

corrected

Erick Thiemke

corrected

Brianna Stormcloud

Thanks 📖🍿

Andrew Crews

I took both yellow scarves as I wasn’t going to * Gaius have a chance to collect his from Kasper. I took both yellow scarves as I wasn’t going to let Gaius have a chance to collect his from Kasper.

Andrew Crews

The two frail old women looked *at orphans and abandoned babies. The two frail old women looked after orphans and abandoned babies.

Andrew Crews

Two of the pups who won the right to boots couldn’t channel their aether effectively, so Konstantin awarded them *others who could. Two of the pups who won boots couldn’t channel their aether effectively, so Konstantin awarded them to others who could.

Mason Benoit

I took both yellow scarves as I wasn’t going to Gaius have a chance to collect his from Kasper. Let*

Damon Bynum

Thank you.

Erick Thiemke

you caught up for your tier. 2 more chapters are released every Wednesday

Damon Bynum

I can’t find chapters 225 to 243

Oeon

Finally I can get some sleep lol. Otherwise I might have just keep going til latest cha-... oh wait I technically did

Robert Biederman

I can't afford $25 a month I wish I could but what I'm going to do is I'll pay the 17 and then once I catch up I'm going to cancel that and then go back to $8 a month that's all I can afford

Robert Biederman

Several of the pops were stupid enough to fight back against the pups and were subdued by the guards this line here one word should go and the other one moved over it should read like---several of the pups were stupid enough to fight against the guards and were subdued with Force

Robert Biederman

There should be a scale here I could see the aether pool dropping down a little that would be noticeable for other creatures and four bipedal beings it would be even more so

Robert Biederman

If it is Spirit or soul a mouse would have very little of either and not all creatures would calibrated the same you see where I'm going with this

Robert Biederman

I have a question I've been meaning to ask for a while now something that is a head scratcher for me cuz it really doesn't make all that much sense in that it seems that no matter the size of the creature it always bottoms out his aether pool which doesn't make sense to me something the size of a mouse with very little brain size and vitality why would it bottom out his aether pool it just doesn't make sense to me

Ivan Kanewske

“Got caught tacking a decoy. Been locked up all day.” The guards Should be tracking

Zurko

tacking->tracking

Silver Beard

The pot belly at the end of the chapter who sneered at him

Daniel kanevsky

I think some time in his 3rd century he'll miss him

Daniel kanevsky

As they said in the Soviet army, "mother's will bear more sons."

Erick Thiemke

Eryk wont miss him at all

Thresher

Appreciate the chapter. I’m going to miss Konstantin when Eyrk goes to work for the Centurion.

striderfighter

I added the Let...it wasn't in the original sentence

NightRider

I have my suspicions that you maybe correct! As stated, “Girl orphans have no value to the empire”

NightRider

By keeping both it will make Eryk a lone wolf, which is the objective he is trying to achieve

NightRider

Several pups were stupid enough to fight back against the pups and were subdued by guards with force. This sentence is a little confusing. Maybe it should read, Several of the hunted pups were stupid enough to fight back against the tracking pups and both were subdued by the guards with force.

Erick Thiemke

That too

NightRider

The two frail old women looked at orphans. Should read, looked after orphans

Erick Thiemke

Yeah it was mostly written last night and just needed a few hundred more words this morning.

striderfighter

I took both yellow scarves as I wasn’t going to (LET) Gaius have a chance to collect his from Kasper.

BubblyGhost

Which guy is the one he's supposed to convince?

Silver Beard

Wonder if the first distasteful thing will be to kill the old ladies and the kids after Castian says he head seditious talk and the others back his word?

Justin Garrett

Thanks for the update on the 4th

Silver Beard

Maybe the fat man will change his tune when Eryk proves success. Efficient victory is usually prized.

Silver Beard

One sentence about pups fighting pups [guards] and were detained by force. ?

Andrew

Thank you!

Erick Thiemke

1st of 4 for cycle. Off to Fourth party and should finish up the World Sphere chapter I started yesterday late tonight


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