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A Soldiers Life - 219 - Cruel Fate

🕑 Added 2024-06-24 21:15:20 +0000 UTC

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Joey Regan

Edit suggestion: At the end of the chapter there’s an unnecessary word, “Konstantin’s hard gaze silenced the dissenters with as we received our dinner from Egg” delete with or change it to a forthwith synonym. I think immediately would fit with Konstantin’s perceived harshness and the circumstances

Erick Thiemke

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Brianna Stormcloud

Thanks 😊

Andrew Crews

You get spooked or chased; run north as fast *your legs will carry you.” You get spooked or chased; run north as fast as your legs will carry you.”

Oeon

It was a good chance to learn about the hound, their internal structure, and their tracking abilities, just in case he needs to flee from them in the future

Robert Biederman

He isn't actually learning anything by doing this tsk tsk

Ivan Kanewske

He soon had an arrow in his eye, and she stopped struggling soon after. Only the deep breaths of the I think it should be he soon had an arrow in her eye, Not his eye

Unwired Rob

I understand the desire to unlock other affinities, but it seems like getting the ones you have (especially those that you haven't created a spellform for) up to a good level would be the priority. Having one at 30 is much better than having three at 5 IMHO - or am I missing something?

Tetsu-nii

Typo: /most in opportune time/ => /most inopportune time/

Tetsu-nii

Punctuation: Missing q-marks around /Drink this after I align the bone. / And that should end the paragraph.

Tetsu-nii

Punctuation: /it stopped panting for breath not used to exercise/ => /it stopped, panting for breath, not used to exercise/ missing commas.

Tetsu-nii

/keeping Dirk and I in the center/ => /[…] Dirk and *me* …/

Tetsu-nii

Suggestion: /Remain to stay at range and only join in when after we start our attack./ => EITHER /remain at range […] join in when …/ OR /Stay at range […] join in after …/ Looks like leftovers from previous drafts.

Tetsu-nii

Suggestion: /leave it to fend on its own/ => /to fend *for itself*/ or /leave it on its own/

Tetsu-nii

Typo (misplaced closing quotation mark): /“Disabling shot, Hearne announced flatly.”/ Q-mark should follow /shot,/

Grant lee merrifield

Woot

Silver Beard

No doubt there will be tests, opportunities for graft, etc. Eryk just has to stick to his script and report any perception of sedition or disloyalty. Basically he's going to play the brown-noser anytime the Emperors name comes up.

JollyRodger

Just how does one diminstraight 'undieing loyalty' to the emperor? That's a suckers' play for sure. Don't drink the coolaid my man

blond mutant

Cheers for the chapter

Scion

I also wouldn't mind an urban assassination

Scion

We haven't seen Urban stuff yet can we see some Urban training?

dethrothes

TFTC!

Andrew

Thank you!

Erick Thiemke

4th of 4 for cycle. Next cycle starts Wed. Thinking two more chapters of Hound training before he 'graduates'


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