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A Soldier's Life - 239 - Sherlocking

🕑 Added 2024-08-01 15:40:16 +0000 UTC

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Erick Thiemke

corrected

Erick Thiemke

corrected

Erick Thiemke

corrected

Brianna Stormcloud

Thanks 📖🍿

Andrew Crews

Ogala was much *liver than I thought it should be, with the potential of a goblin horde nearby. Ogala was much livelier than I thought it should be, with the potential of a goblin horde nearby.

J S

Oooh

Ivan Kanewske

Ogala was much liver than I thought it should be, with the potential of a goblin horde nearby Much liver should probably be Much more livelier or lively

Tetsu-nii

Pronoun issue: /heard them draw his sword/ either "*him* draw his …" OR "them draw *their* …"

Tetsu-nii

Typo(?): /talking louder of the growing clamor/ => /talking louder *over(?)* the growing clamor/

Enk

bah, never mind, it's clear enough. I wish i'd stop hitting 'enter' though

Enk

answering self: it's because it's always in yards in the skill descriptions, my bad. "I was shocked by the extent to which my pulse had extended, it was almost fifty feet after the bulette earth essence. " May i suggest: the meaning is only clear after your explanation. What's wrong with '...pulse had grown almost 17 more yards after...'.

Enk

oh yes you do say feet - i dunno when i switched myself to yards.

Erick Thiemke

I will add some details why he thinks it old

Erick Thiemke

57 feet not 57 affinity

Andrew

Thank you!

Enk

was also unaware earthspeak returned anything other than a shape. 'Resting for hundreds of years'? That's an archaeologist's assessment of earthspeak maybe...or the skill just gets better, or our hero's brain is just getting better, great either way...but...sudden?

Enk

in passing...diner/dinner. also, i wasn't aware that earth affinity had leapt to 57 (for almost 50yd earthspeak). I must've lost track somewhere (was 38 in c222).

Jon

I think I remember you mentioning having difficulty coming up with ideas on what to do with his other affinities. Have you thought about adding spell forms that utilize more than one affinity? Might be interesting to do and the archives seems like the perfect place to have this hidden knowledge. Thanks for the chapter btw!

Gwalmeich

Damn, earth speak is starting to become really powerful right about now. Being able to map out part of the archives before even setting foot in it will be very useful. I'll be putting some Metal Gear music for the next couple chapters. Will Erik be able to pull an S-rank and complete the mission with a perfect score?

Silver Beard

Space at full capacity might be important soon

Silver Beard

Going through an established entrance doesn't seem like a good idea unless he's going to stake it out for weeks. Break in elsewhere with his space.. Might be a good place to release his captives. Somewhat away from the immediate front and the Mage would have a vested interest in destroying her blood and everyone else's. Good distraction possibly.

Erick Thiemke

an ancient construction by the feel of the pulse. Something that had been resting for hundreds of years.

Erick Thiemke

corrected

Angus

Thanks for the chapter!

Tetsu-nii

Tetsu-nii

Truncated: /more vast—an ancient./ *tunnel system*? *labyrinth*?

Tetsu-nii

Suggestion: /extended to almost fifty feet after the bulette earth essence/ => /extended, almost …/ (add comma & delete "to")

Tetsu-nii

Typo: /beggar of plebian/ => /beggar *or* plebian/

Lazarius

Child mages in the city 🧐 the little bitch and the lover maybe 🤔

Thresher

Oh great, tunnels. Wonder how he’s going to burn that down.

striderfighter

What I saw was just the upper levels of something much more vast—an ancient. Ruin?

Mason W

Getting real now!

Moatdog

kinda like the catacombs in paris, except less scary and mysterious

Ali

Is his plan to burn down the whole place before he leaves the empire ?

BubblyGhost

Yippie! Das un new chapter!

1536539

Thank you for the chapter

Erick Thiemke

1st of 4 for cycle. going to read/edit chapter 236 this afternoon before finishing the World Sphere from Sat tonight. Town Builder will be written tomorrow. Audio book is still in review but should be approved soon. There is a posting if you want a free copy, just have to write a nice review https://www.patreon.com/posts/soldier-book-2-108311736


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