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A Soldier's Life - 269 - Burden of Leadership

🕑 Added 2024-09-25 03:58:52 +0000 UTC

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Louis Nel

I wish he would let his friends (who can) into the dreamscape so they can make copies of themselves rather than his impressions of them.

Javen

getting on eryks good side might actually be the best decision anyone could ever make. if you really make him like you you also get the equivalent of an immortal looking after your entire bloodline. he can just keep on taking time essence and stretch that time dilation so far that it might as well be eternity after all.

HappyNoms

"Blaze said, smirking." I'm dying here, nonplussed. If there is ever a feature on RoyalRoad or Patreon that lets a reader mass find and replace a word in a series they're reading, the combined misuse / excessive use of smirking is at the top 3 of my list of words to nuke from orbit. Unless it's describing Natalie Dormer playing Margaery Tyrell in Game of Thrones, who used it as a political weapon to bluff confidence - for a brilliant reason - nobody should be constantly writing characters as smirking, and FFS, Natalie Dormer is prone to subtly smirking predominantly because she has Bell's Palsy. (In all other regards, an excellent chapter. The lines Blaze has, "It just felt right. Every time I draw my bow and release, I get a feeling that my aim is right. I got that feeling with Castile." are just magnificent writing.)

Kevin O'Malley

Gold is worthless if it is hoarded. If he gets back to town he will have earned his money back in less than a decade.

Trevayne

Thanks for the chapter.

Erick Thiemke

correcte

Erick Thiemke

edited

Andrew G.

I really enjoyed the imagery of our motley troupe after Eryk left the Inn at the end of the chapter 🤣. Well done

Jordan A

“my adventurer armor had been cleaned, repaired, and properly fitted by Ignis. However, she despised working with leather and inferior armor.” How about removing the “.” After Ignis and replacing “However,” with “even though”. Flows better.

Erick Thiemke

maybe in book 6. Castile is still grieving the damage to her aether channels

Rene Schweitzer

I feel like there is a missed opportunity for Eryk and Castile to talk before he leaves. She still has the runes for lying to truthseekers so I feel like he should talk a bit about earth with her. Spain at the very least because of her grandpa. Maybe even teach her a local dish or two for the inn?

Karnnie

Great chapter. I hate how easily Eryk tosses money away but I guess that since he is now part owner of 2 businesses, he will have quite a bit of money come the future.

Jordan

He said he would be strung up by the testicles if the Warlord he stole from caught him, and he was being literal, not figurative. Run on sentence

momo2009

Naive

NightRider

Just before Eyrk portals out, I would love to see Viridia arrive to see him off. She could deliver to him a backpack with rations/goods, for the kindness he did for getting her out of the empire. It would put him in even more of a predicament trying to explain to Mateo and the Benito, what his relationship, is with her!

Brandon Baier

I regret nothing

hrs

budged should be nudged when he is feeding ginger the first apple

hrs

"...but it was mateo who asked a question. i always wondered it there were brothels in the elven kingdom." make it "...mateo who spoke up."?

Silver Beard

Plenty happy is he opts to wipe Sergie off the map. Octavian will have lost both Hound Masters and a sizable chunk and logistics of whatever is left. (Just when he needs them the most)

Tetsu-nii

Joke's on you! Still looking forward to it!!! 🤪

Jordan

I’m excited for both chapters coming shortly. Leaving us on this little cliffhanger is dastardly though haha.

Jordan

I’m also curious how she found out Eric was coming.

Jordan

I didn’t realize she was exiled. I thought she was getting blamed to a degree for the deaths of the summoner and his apprentice so they kicked her out of the rangers, but I don’t think exile was mentioned. The reason given for her leaving Bartiradia was so that she could fix familial relations between the those family members living in each country right?

Erick Thiemke

added the 'interviews'

Erick Thiemke

corrected

Erick Thiemke

Konstantin POV coming

Erick Thiemke

added

Erick Thiemke

corrected

Erick Thiemke

you will be disappointed/happy? next chapter is the Konstantin POV

Erick Thiemke

not bad but that would fit better in the last chapter

Erick Thiemke

if i dont - remind me

Aiden Wilker

Ohhh, please tell me she slaps Eryk when they meet for how he packed the griffin egg

Faa Diallo

Aww I wanted to see the mages reaction to getting dumped with Castile. Any chance for a pov?

hrs

"liquid assests" for title? hes selling stuff off also most of his money is made off the wine

Tetsu-nii

Really enjoyed the chapter! So looking forward to the next one! ^_^

Tetsu-nii

Silver Beard

It's implied he was going to return the Mage's stuff/pack but I didn't actually read that he did so.

Silver Beard

It's good that he is running into her then- something he will have to watch out for in the future. Curious the elf mage didn't mention the young gryphon?

Brandon Baier

Next chapter is going to be awesome, I think.

saber

Superr hyped for the next one!

Erick Thiemke

Yes I did. I will add a sentence or two

Erick Thiemke

Yes, missed that. I will was a paragraph about the interviews

Erick Thiemke

The owner ship of the smithy was just more banter. He wasn’t actually planning on it but Ignis will keep her side of the deal and eventually teach him in exchange for full ownership

Erick Thiemke

Yes wrong nation. That was the Bartiradians from which she was exiled

Erick Thiemke

Six he keeps in his dimensional space

Juan Magallon

“Adventure awaits” for title?

NightRider

She removed the stones from the ring and melted the metal down before selling it, heading Castile’s warning. Typo - heeding Castile’s warning.

Silver Beard

the one he was hoping for is out on assignment... and was supposed be back in 2 days... suppose he's overdue now

Silver Beard

Need a little work- he makes a stack of 25 appear but then it's only 6 he leaves after lamenting on the 500 left in the War College. 25 = 6?

Zurko

actually, thinking further, she told his secrets to the elves in her home country. not the elves in artiria. so maybe he's safe? unless they went with her or share information.

Zurko

I'm a bit worried, didn't she tell the elves most, if not all of eryks secrets like affinities, items and that he killed the elven apprentice. think they might do something or just let him go? it didn't seem like the elf girl had any power so she can't help. especially now that she's in another country from her home.

Raelik

I think you forgot to have Eryk leave selene's valuables with Castile. Or was she wearing them?

Kbzzy

Why would he not pass through gramney again in Castille’s lifetime when he’s going to be coming by every few years to see Ignis anyway?

Silver Beard

Thoroughly enjoyed it. Tied up a bunch of loose ends, especially the sales. Eryk might not be worried about gold today- but there's always tomorrow. Sucks they never found an Orc facilitator. Perhaps the elf's will be more forthcoming with one of their own.

Jordan

Wasn’t Eric supposed to meet some orcs in the duchy and potentially select one as a guide?

Raelik

Touchè. Lol if I had any energy I'd return to my own story. Hmm would be short. Not sure if I'd be good at Castile's particular form of rude competace. It's to bad that Castile is straight in the Canon. I think Selene might swing the other way if I'm interpreting what we've seen so far right.

Erick Thiemke

Fan fiction submission ?

Erick Thiemke

Fan fiction submissions are coming due….

Andrew

Thank you!

Raelik

A shock or tongue-tied for chapter name. I would also like to see the interaction between Castile and Selene.

Win Rar

I would love a small paragraph of the interaction between Castile and the mage when she wakes up . Or maybe as an option in an upcoming side story poll?

Erick Thiemke

4th of 4 for cycle. next cycle starts tomorrow. Still have a World Sphere cooking though. It was late and I might have rushed the last 700 words in this chapter. Lots of 'business' to tie up in one chapter but I wanted to get onto the adventure!


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