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World Sphere - 1 - The Failed Human Resources Liaison

🕑 Added 2024-11-24 20:33:22 +0000 UTC

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Erick Thiemke

https://www.patreon.com/collection/469669

Mercutio Montano

As this is an pre-edited work, and already published, I am moving my comments to the correct thread.

Jamie Idle

I came here from ASL and it seems your MCd make some rather eclectic power choices. Interesting so far

Jordan A

That’s a reasonable explanation. It would be helpful for the reader to hear your explanation in some way (random musings, internal dialogue thinking about how he kept his cooking knowledge/skills, etc.) as it is such a large difference from the rest of the population it really needs some kind of explanation or speculative thoughts about it.

Erick Thiemke

I just am acting like it wasn't necessary since he interrupted his reincarnation. he has fuzzy past life memories but nothing complete or perfectly clear

Jordan A

I’m surprised ‘prior life memories’ was a trait/ability that was removed. It doesn’t make sense (at least to me) for him to have any recollection of his prior life if that is removed unless he’s given it randomly later on like his lightning affinity.

Knightfire

My favorite series

Erick Thiemke

either i will edit 5-6 chapters a week or write a new chapter

Erick Thiemke

correcting. i reduced the points from 25 to 23 and removed to tier 1 abilities, life extention and assess person

Brett F

The grammar and spelling are much improved over the older posts. The only issue I found was in the first paragraph. I think there should be a comma after "the path didn't last long[,]". Also, is his metal shaping ability no longer tier 5? He should have enough points if the max is 25. Does he have 25 or 23 points for abilities? The text mentions 23 as the max, then he enters 25, so it is unclear. Will there be a new World Sphere chapter today? Keep up the good work!

Erick Thiemke

yeah - it was my version of Twilight/Constantine with lots of sex

Eddie

cool, no worries. i usually don't like smut/harem stuff but i really enjoyed your writing style for incubus. i imagine it's a headache balancing all the character relationships though.

Erick Thiemke

eventually but i dont know when at this point

Eddie

do you ever plan to go back to incubus or is it dropped?

Lemes

I swear I tried to like this story but it's definitely not for me. I can't connect with the world or the story itself. I like fantasy but this kind of story is an overdose for me. I think I'll just stick with the soldier only.

visigoth

phew. that part seemed a little unnecessary - and there wasn't much development from it.

Erick Thiemke

just 6 today

Erick Thiemke

no - the kick to the nuts is getting cut. (from the story)

visigoth

whelp, time to reread storme almost losing his life and manhood as a kid again lmao

MN

Are we gonna see a re-publishing of a whole bunch of chapters now?

Erick Thiemke

it is going to ebook in January. i like this story and it has a decent fan abse

BubblyGhost

Haven't read it before, what made you decide on a rewrite?

Erick Thiemke

this is it, the final edit of World Sphere. the overall plot is the same but some changes and hopefully better accounting


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