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World Sphere - 16 - Fluff Monster

🕑 Added 2024-12-05 21:33:01 +0000 UTC

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GucciG

Storme's behavior toward his brother doesn't make too much sense. I could see you aiming to make him an antagonist or even a villain--someone who joins the underworld of Skyholme or becomes some noble's pawn to keep Storme in check. At least, I think Storme should be making an effort to befriend his brother like he does with the rest of his family.

Jack Trance

missing "queues", should be "cues"

Andrew

Thank you!

Erick Thiemke

going to finish the last few paragraphs of Soldier 307 before editing another chapter for this story


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