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A Soldier's Life - 301 - Konstantin Crashes The Party (final edit 7-9-25)

🕑 Added 2024-11-25 06:12:00 +0000 UTC

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Andi Nygaard-Hansen

“I am here for my goliath friend,” she motioned to Maveith. “I have not been kidnapped or abused—much.” She added the last little bit while his (HER) eyes roamed to me. Konstantin followed her eyes to me, a little bit of surprise on his face.

Erick Thiemke

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Erick Thiemke

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Andrew Crews

The woman continued as if Konstantin hadn’t interrupted her. “We think the warlord has her on an estate north of here, but elites and Pathfinders heavily guard it, and several clerics are also on the grounds. We were turned back both times when we wandered close, and I don’t care to try again. [There] are mastiffs that patrol the grounds and can sniff out anything.” I looked to the woman, and [that] might explain why she smelled like cinnamon. “We did learn the estate is where the Cleric Elders reside [who] advise the Supreme,” Konstantin said. That was just like Konstantin, getting more done in less time. Now that he was here, I supposed he would take over.”* Final Edited Version: *“The woman continued as if Konstantin hadn’t interrupted her. “We think the warlord has her on an estate north of here, but elites and Pathfinders heavily guard it, and several clerics are also on the grounds. We were turned back both times when we wandered close, and I don’t care to try again. There are mastiffs that patrol the grounds and can sniff out anything.” I looked to the woman, and that might explain why she smelled like cinnamon. “We did learn the estate is where the Cleric Elders reside who advise the Supreme,” Konstantin said. That was just like Konstantin, getting more done in less time. Now that he was here, I supposed he would take over.”*

Andrew Crews

“I helped free them as well,” the young woman interjected from the doorway. She had [already drawn] Mateo’s focus.”*

MavTech

that's my next read. is it on RR or should i just read on Patreon?

Erick Thiemke

did the following chapter address this?

Kimberlee

Maybe more internal debate/dialogue by Erik at the possibility cede decision making to K. Or acknowledgment of the significance of K following his lead

Jeremy Pippen Jr

This book is great but after reading “the sphere” just WOW. I have read it constantly the last 4 days to finish it and it did not disappoint and is now by far my favorite book of yours, I would love to see it written at the same pace as a soliders life! and I’m sure whoever else reads it would agree

Mark Corwin

Tyfc.

Silver Beard

She added the last little bit while [her] his eyes roamed to me.

Erick Thiemke

Castile alluded to Eryk transporting them...it was not formally stated but understood she explained it to him

Carnaza

I Think the problem is konstantin chapter placement , should have been sooner. ATM feels forced.

Salvo

Nothing about the telhain empire status as well. Konstantin built up Eryk to do an impossible mission and doesn’t thank him? He also knows he is an out-worlder, and isn’t interested? A historian doesn’t feel the need to ask him anything is strange. What does he want with Eryk?

Salvo

I think you need to build the caliphate more. How does Eryk as an other worlder feel how they govern? You had Mynasha care about saving the troll hostages and it just stops. She could have left Eryk to save them, ‘war chiefs maximize honor, not hostages too weak to save themselves.’ You brought up the 3 sub Orks and it never really mattered, could a war chief tax them differently? Seriously, no pathfinders this whole time? No runaway slaves? Are they sold or freed?

Jordan A

Was that conversation supposed to be in prior chapters? I don’t think Eryk’s ability specifically stated.

Antti Kunttu

Pokemon reference, a random encounter mechanism, all of the pokemons are referred as "wild xxx appears"

John Donovan

I don't disagree with anything you have said and ultimately this is your story and we are here for the ride. I would just suggest to read not just the last 2 chapters but the last 5 or 10. There is a flow that is abruptly stopped when Eryk doesn't need to do anything to discover what this entire book has been about, his friend's sister. I would love to read more about Konstatin but right now he feels shoe horned into the story again.

Deliver roo

A Pokemon reference I guess.

Erick Thiemke

corrected

Erick Thiemke

corrected

Erick Thiemke

yes she is covering her smell so she isnt discovered

Erick Thiemke

Castle told Konstantin he could store people

Erick Thiemke

Wild?

Erick Thiemke

Eryk never thought Konstantin was dead. But I thought it was somewhat sappy

Erick Thiemke

Konstantin's role is going to be somewhat small in the last few chapters...he will play a much bigger role in book 6. Maybe I could rewrite his POV to add 4,000 words where he follows the trail across the Caliphate. We will see but if he knew where they were going, it makes sense that he would take the most direct route to get there. There was a subplot when Eryk was given the anti-scrying stone that Konstantin lost Eryk with the Blood Compass and thought he was dead (again), but I never added it

Alex

Yeah they totally need A good.FIGHT

PatronTurtle

Cinnamon smell? Does she have a distinct smell as a shape shifter and has to cover it up? Maybe like a skinwalker and there's a smell of rot

John Donovan

I was disappointed by these two chapters. Book 3 is by far my favorite book. The reason is the character growth that Eryk has undergone. Now I love Konstatin but right now in this part of the story it feels like a interruption. I would of preferred Konstatin following in the wake of Eryk's group. Konstatin using his hound skills he follows Eryk's trail, always seeming a step behind. During Konstatin's chase he starts to piece together some of the things Eryk has been hiding. I am sorry but Konstatin just popping out of the air with all the info Eryk's group needs after playing a minor role in the last 70 chapters feels like plot armor and forced.

Chachi

ah ok thanks for clarifying

Order

Seconded

Order

Selene is the Mage, the one Eyrk was meant to kill when he was a hound but put her in his dimensional space instead, Viridia is the mother of the 2 children he was meant to kill but staged their murder and burned their house.

Justin Barnett

Maybe let Konstantin and Eryk have a more emotional reunion, or you could have them discuss more of what happened while they were separated.

Chachi

is selene viridia or are thry two different ppl?

Order

Damn no sappy reunion between Eyrk and Kon? All that build up thinking each other were dead, Eyrk could send the men down with the Shapeshifter so he could speak to Kon in private

Antti Kunttu

Dunno why, but really wanted the title to be "A wild Konstantin appears." :D

KipBR

You could add a bit of Konstantin being surprised about how he survived, or about how he helped so many different people escape. Unless all the questioning is coming later. Also Konstantin maybe could question about the burning of the blood samples.

Alex

Or the K and G tell a story of trying.to infiltrate the warlords estate

Alex

After K asks Eryk that Q. He hears the recap.and then takes.Eryk to.spar.in the yard.

hasrul naim

I already collected on the debt Viridia owed you.” My face twisted in confusion, and that just made an unnatural smile... Ayy Konstantin is flexing@@

Andrew

Thank you !

Hudson Mckenna

“I came to make sure you didn’t do something stupid and get yourself or one of your companions.” should have "killed" at the end, no?

shabbybook

I came to make sure you didn’t do something stupid and get yourself or one of your companions. “Killed” is missing from the end

Erick Thiemke

2nd of four. It is too short currently and needs another 400 or so words to meet my standard. I like the ended but ideas to fill out the body are welcome


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