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World Sphere - 210 - Laying The Keel

🕑 Added 2025-03-05 18:44:49 +0000 UTC

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Russell French

Seconded. She went from interesting to annoying

Bradley Arnold

“I am going to a dwarven city to purchase a new skyship.” I replied. “Shopping! Sounds like a perfect vacation!” Aelyn grinned madly at me. “You have your gold to spend,” I teased ~ Ecchoing a recent other comment, this relationship feels very shallow lately, and i feel Ayelin since her return after the teleport away has lost a lot of depth. This could be due to book one edits making the character super interesting but that seems lost in the last 50 odd. Exacerbated by her being constantly brushed off with regular comments around spending and no real (recently shown) character traits or relationship strain from the semi-toxic treatment.

Bradley Arnold

I worked. The got to enjoy my hospitality a cheap food and drink while I worked. The captain shadowed me as I worked ~ 'I worked' 3x in 1 passage

Ivan Kanewske

Also Ships built to ram Ramming speed, boarding actions Arg

Ivan Kanewske

This should be interesting, Ship docks and builders, no source of dungeon wood for building, stone and ships go out, eventually, dungeon wood and supplies go in, he now has a shiny ship building empire Muhahahaha

Ivan Kanewske

and the fees for the Maelstrom were even settled. Not sure if you need the word even in this sentence

Ivan Kanewske

“Maybe I can make you change you tune?” Aelyn Second you to your Again a mercurial overlay from Aelyn, although it could also be construed as flirting,

Ivan Kanewske

She was either delving into politicking in Skyhold. Into to or

Ivan Kanewske

You will be compensated as such once the hundred delves are complete and all paperwork is filed with the guild.” An apostrophe after such,

Ivan Kanewske

The talk with Mia was not long and she could crew the ships with the exception of the pilots and navigators. I think an apostrophe after long,

Ivan Kanewske

Now that she was in charge of one of the most lucrative positions in the city, she earned a lot more respect. This doesn't feel quite right, Now that she is in charge of security for one of the most lucrative companies in the city, Something to that effect, Maybe you should have a shiny platinum security company as well, It would also give you a reason to have a large force armed and trained people in the future

Ivan Kanewske

The got to enjoy my hospitality a cheap food and drink while I worked. The to they A to and THEY got to enjoy my hospitality AND cheap food and drink while I worked.

Ivan Kanewske

“There is good gold in an exploratory delves Either remove the an Or add team “There is good gold in an exploratory delves team.

Erick Thiemke

thank you

Sam Miller

ARAO! I read all the books of solider in about a month. However I finished World Sphere in like a week and a half. The entire fantasy world has to be out favorite world set up! I hope you can do soldier and world equally in the future. But keep up the good work! Love both stories mate!

Nairolf90

Thanks for the reply! And that a Relief to me. Like i Said i was just anxious because the buildup of their relationship took so Long and i wouldve been really sad if it was over already. Keep up your Stories, i started Not Long ago but this Story and a soldiers life are already one of my favorite Stories ever!

Erick Thiemke

its early in the arc. but the arc is mostly about bringing the islands together and setting up Skyholme as power broker in this region of the Sphere. There still is a romantic element to their relationship, but they are both doing their own things ATM, different focus. Aelyn is handling Storme's social responsibility while Storme is doing his High Mage thing

Nairolf90

I know I Posted some comments under 2 other Chapters already but im really wondering what happened to Aelyn. She seemed like a really wellwritten loveinterest in the beginning but now the relationship between her and storme feels rather shallow if not outright nonexistent or rather it feels like they just went back to being friends without ever Breaking up. Like, there is Zero intimacy (and im Not Talking about Sex or kisses but there seems to be no emotional Bond at all) shown between them and it makes me really Wonder whether this is intended or not. Right now it feels to me like even Kiara would be a more fitting love interest/ female lead character. It feels Like Aelyn doesnt care anymore and only comes up every few chapter to make a one line lewd Suggestion that storme flatout denies or to go on a Shopping Spree. The Rest of the time shes not mentioned except for going dungeon Delving. Dont missunderstand me, i really like the Story and know that romance is Not the Main Focus of the Story, but it really makes me anxious, how their relationship is dropped Like this. Especially since i think you really are doing Well in the romance aspect in a soldiers Life.

Brianna Stormcloud

Thanks for the chapter! 📖🍿 Storme is being tricky again, whoops sorry 'negotiating'! *Edit suggestions: I needed to buy a new skyship, well maybe not new*>comma< * I>a decent used ship that I could update with what I needed. We had decided on two week *>period of< repeated delves in the Goblin Vault before returning to Skyholme for a week. “You have your *own gold to spend,” I teased. The *yards foreman> Yard Foreman< was an ancient-looking dwarf, and we needed the translation spell to communicate with him. *A>I had seen several empty dry docks in the yard. “How long until completion?"

Kallen23

Personally I like this story has more than just magic involved and I like how the characters are developing. Keep going on the book

Lemes

Personally, I don't like this story (actually, I don't like stories where everything is solved with magic. I find it boring), but really, the soldier's story was a bit boring in this last book. Very slow and drawn out.

Chad cline

I am having the same feeling. I still love the other story but this is my favorite story now. The size of the “world” and the concept is so fun. The characters are great.

Jamie Idle

Ironically I am far more interested in World Sphere than Soldier now

Erick Thiemke

last night's chapter. Tonight I think the plan on the weekly schedule is to edit 5 chapters of book 4 Soldier


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