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A Soldier's Life - 355 - Uninvited

🕑 Added 2025-03-07 21:22:19 +0000 UTC

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Hamfist

"I was fortunate that my cabin was located at the stern of the Prosperity. The fumes from my alchemy were drawn out the window, ..." How much impact do the weather mages have on the flow of air around the ship? I ask because in am IRL sailing ship the wind usually comes from behind so it can push on the sails. That is why the captain's quarters are the large cabin at the stern where he gets the freshest air. Meanwhile the "head" of the ship is up front at the bow and even today navy ships refer to toilets as "the head." So unless the weather mages are generating wind that pushes _only_ against the sails, being at the stern of the ship would mean that fumes are being blown into the rest of the ship, not away.

Igor Chmurski

"i'm not a linguist" says a Man able to speak four languages, read another in a completely diffrent alphabet and currectly learning fith

GucciG

I have a few comments to make. First off, I was excited to see the rest of the world but I feel like how it was done sucked all the enjoyment and enthusiasm from me. It didn't really feel like an adventure or journey but rather a glossed-over summary. Godock was interesting, and it would've been nice to experience its intricacies more, but I understand they're rushing back. I was left wanting more and hope to see more in the future. It made your world feel extremely small and less magical. Second, I'm not a fan of Lesna. I find her to be nothing more than a shorter Raelia, minus the occasional fiery flare. I actually wouldn't mind a halfling illusionist since that is unique, but she's essentially a carbon copy of Raelia when it comes to personality. There are a ton of readers who *still* find Raelia annoying, even if she did mellow out in the end, so I don't find it wise to introduce a second female character like that. It comes across as very one-note. I'm not sure if Lesna will actually stick around but I got that impression, hence the comment. I'm looking forward to seeing everyone meet back up. I'm curious to see what arc comes next but it could easily be Eryk settling down for a massive time skip. That, or the events of the Telhian Empire will come back to bite him, especially with that Firch dude running around. Either Castile is dead, or she's bait. At least, that's my theory at the moment.

Erick Thiemke

i might have gotten them confused - one of the nations is German and the other is Spanish derived. I think I decided after Evie's POV so that might be way there is an error

J. L. Mullins

sounded like a derivative of Spanish In the previous chapter, it was said to be a like german, and those languages do NOT sound similar... (But that might just be to my ear?) I pushed the picture of a warm ale → I pushed the PITCHER of a warm ale

Andrew Crews

She put on her [best to flash → best effort to flash] a sexy smile—but it wasn’t working for her. I was not interested in a miniature human, and she tended to rub me the wrong way. “Well, it is your fault I am here.” Her eyes switched to studying the black spear. She had probably figured out I either had a storage artifact or a dimensional space. Heartseeker vanished. “Get out!” I growled, not [caring for → interested in] her explanation. I scoffed, “After attacking them? Unlikely. They would have killed you, too.” I stepped aside to let her leave, “[I’m → I am] not going to be responsible for hiding a stowaway.” Lesna pouted, “[That wasn’t → That wasn’t] very nice.” She seemed completely unconcerned when two burly sailors approached, shackled her wrists, and led her to meet the captain. I hoped I had done the right thing. Even with three weather mages on board, the voyage to reach the city of Yuetsen was [going to be → expected to take] eight weeks. By the time we arrived, we would have sailed completely around the world. A large number of ships were moored in a massive eddy below the bluff, and that is where the Prosperity [soon dropped → dropped anchor soon]. The first mate shouted to a small gondola, and soon several barges headed from the shore to collect the passengers and cargo. Since we had purchased the luxury cabins, we were allowed on the first barge to reach the shore. The language sounded like a derivative of Spanish, but I was no linguist. There were enough Latin words mixed in that I could almost follow along. It probably helped that I was wearing the amulet of clarity at the moment, but I would switch it for the aether shield amulet after we registered in the Adventurer’s Guild Hall. The Adventurer’s Hall was a squat sandstone building featuring an open-air common room. This design was due to the city’s summer heat. To cope, an undercity had been carved into the sandstone. I secured three rooms for us and then observed the other adventurers while I waited for Konstantin. Not wanting to engage, I waved off a few adventurers who asked to join me. The language barrier was frustrating, and if they had spoken Elvish, I might have [made an effort → been more inclined]. “She started it,” I said, sounding [petulant → petulantly] and regretting it. Konstantin rolled his eyes in disappointment and left me after downing the rest of his mug. The attire for the city mostly consisted of thin, loose-fitting clothing. They preferred whites and off-whites, probably because they were cooler in the sun. The adventurers seemed to prefer a curved sword, but I guessed the number of mages here was higher than [normal– → normal—] at least with my aether sight, I observed several of them utilizing aether during the afternoon. “It is done. He can do it in three teleports. I have [a passage → passage] for the three of us,” he said tiredly. The next morning, as we left the Hall, Lesna was outside holding the [reigns → reins] of a massive pony. Konstantin walked past her, and Gilda followed to let me explain to the halfling woman she was not invited.

Silver Beard

I don't hate her enough to take her essence, but she did suggest she was willing to sell him out. This isn't the attitude to take home to Castille and others who are conspiring against Octavian's rule. Not that the Hounds would take her word per ce; but Castille and others are wanted fugitives. Exactly how hard would it be for her to be invisible and become a fly on the wall and listen in to their deliberations? So, as long as Lesna gets whatever she wants- it's OK to keep her around? Author- you aren't creating exciting chat- you are creating a Monster than MUST be culled permanently. I'm also mighty frustrated with Konstantin's negligence. Lesna suggested selling out all 3 of them... not just Eryk, but he's OK with that. Tempted to suggest calling that bluff. Let him go back to Castille without Eryk and explain how he hangged him out to dry for experience and Castille's cure might never arrive now.

Apophixas

Bruh, he's heading back to Castille, who has been sowing chaos in Tehlia from afar, and in less than a year Raelia is coming back with his child.

Mark Corwin

Absolutely no rest for the wicked. I don't want to send Konstantin after you.

jack axe

Look at this photograph

NovaZero

No ale for you. Only picture! 😂

saber

She's got little sister energy to me I see her as a tool to make eyrk do things and get out of his comfort zone. The story will get stale unless there is some kinda chaos element to spice the story up.

Enk

Yeah there's more to the shrimp than meets they eye, could be fun :) Also, now that horse needs rescuing.

jack axe

Eryk passed a picture of ale

Karnnie

This Lesna chick is obviously pushing herself into his group but she is annoying as hell.

Karnnie

Konstantin arrived before Lesna and sat with me. I pushed the picture of a warm ale and a clean mug to him. Konstantin arrived before Gilda and sat with me. I pushed the pitcher of warm ale and a clean mug to him.

Silver Beard

Hope her Aether resistance sucks so Eryk can stash her away in his space... and then drop her out somewhere else.

Sunto

Hate her too, really hoping she doesn’t bullshit guilt trip Eryk into buying her a ticket

Stephen Gauthier

Lesna is an interesting character. It adds depth to the story and perhaps at some point she will have a POV story on her which always add depth to a character.

Silver Beard

I hate her. I made my objections on discord. Then to attempt blackmail? Want to feel bad about the horse, but it's likely stolen.

Bookworm bibliophile

She is Eryks problem not mine.

Justin Barnett

Curious on everyone’s opinion of Lesna. I find her irritating because of how obviously self interested she is and how she is trying to forcefully insert herself into the group.

Chachi

fuck it eryk impales lesna and uses the collector on her for the nice illusion essence

Andrew

Thank you!

visigoth

feel better!

saber

I like the little halfling. It's always fun to have a little chaos element to frustrate and make eryk get out of his comfort zone and take some risks.

Alias

Good chapter. All this travel is really fleshing out the world outside the Empire. Also, has Eryk perhaps found his first Aether shaping coach? Doing it without hand movements sounds advanced.

Eriach

Hope you get to feeling better

Erick Thiemke

Last nights chapter. Got a little bit of the flu but im fine. Working on the next now


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