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Town Builder - 89 -

🕑 Added 2025-02-03 00:21:24 +0000 UTC

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J S

Uh-oh. For sure.

Jack Trance

totally fair, i like your stories regardless :)

Erick Thiemke

I agree, especially about the NPC relationships. I also agree with the comparison to Starship Engineer. For that story, I was pushing to complete it. This one is similar in that I want to hit all my plot points but get to the end of book 2. It takes me a lot more effort to write this story than Soldier. Whereas a year ago, I could write a chapter of Town Builder in 3-4 hours, it takes twice that time now. Although that is the same with all my stories as I am second guessing almost everything I type these days. But more so for this story.

Jack Trance

to be honest, the last dozen chapters have suffered the same issue as Starship Engineer as the character has existing relationships that are built on shared hardships, and then they just ignore them and put pressure on people around them. if anything, the lack of character and interpersonal growth is what kills the feeling of progress in stories, regardless of where or how theyre published.

Silver Beard

That's the idea.. with her spells she can cross the distance to be some effect to support Danny to fight off the attack.

Eriach

Lol they've messed with the wrong bunny -nose twitch- someone explodes in a shower of blood

Erick Thiemke

too many side plots going on at once...this usually kills stories in this type of genre. i am trying to split chapters, half on one point and the other half on the other. and then add a few sentences to pull the other plots along the timeline

LundeFool

I really like the story so far. Lately I feel like you have rushed the story along without giving the plot’s time to seem important.

Bryan Schnebly

I think you released this to the wrong tier. This is a big jump from where I'm at.

Silver Beard

They are after the Air Engine works, ugh. Send the Rabbit.

Erick Thiemke

this story always takes a lot longer to write. i was at 2900 words last night and thought i would finish but no. a few hours today and another 1000 words


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