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World Sphere - 44 - Qualifiers

🕑 Added 2025-04-18 23:16:25 +0000 UTC

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Joseph Snyder

“Gareth, we will be one of the two slots from the city. I will probably take the other.” Pascal and father looked toward me at my announcement. “Gareth, will be one of the two slots from the city. I will probably take the other.” Pascal and father looked toward me at my announcement.

Joseph Snyder

Gareth would be happy learning the twins would be at academy with us.

Joseph Snyder

Gareth would be happy with the learning the twins would be at academy with us.

Jordan A

“A defeatearned a single silver.” Separate ‘defeat’ and ‘earned’

Jordan A

“Things do not return to normalcy after the Sadian attack.” Do -> did This paragraph and the next paragraph are talking about things that’s happened in the past so should be in past tense. This verb is the only one not in past tense in 2 paragraphs.

Dennis Crocker

I was wondering about the mithril from book 1 to 2. It was a big deal to end book 1, but reading the first draft of all the chapters moving forward, it was as if the point was forgotten and never brought up again.

Dennis Crocker

“foodfrom” as one word; “Gareth, we will be one of the two slots from the city. I will probably take the other.” I’m guessing the “we” shouldn’t be there. ; “ defeatearned”; “ itin”. I am happy to see his age is back up to 15 in this rewrite. He must be close to 16 by the amount of time spent training.

Dennis Crocker

Love the story! I found a few things;


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