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World Sphere - 48 - Up And At Em Campers!

🕑 Added 2025-05-01 01:54:54 +0000 UTC

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Jim Robbins

The dimensional closet started off as a 10 foot cube. The evolutionary size increases were 2 feet in each dimension. The closet is supposed to grow evenly as his aether core expands. So why would it not remain a cube?

NovaZero

starring -> staring

Lindasm

That would allow Gareth and I to be silently altered when Aelyn got here in the Typo That would allow Gareth and I to be silently alerted when Aelyn got here in the

Tom

She was an archmage - and had - authored my copy of the cleanliness spell” Avoids too much repetition of “she”

Jordan A

“Gareth got irritated by the popping sound the shelves made when they disappeared, but I told him he could cover his earswith my pillow he never returned. “ Separate ‘ears’ and ‘with’

Jordan A

“Apparently, Elora had pressured Callem into shortening everyinstruction blocks by 15 minutes except for the one-hour bathing period.” Remove ‘every’ so that it reads “…Callem into shortening instruction blocks by 15…”

Jordan A

“Last time Selina snuck back to Skyholme, and we became friends.” Remove “, and” so the sentence reads like the following: “Last time Selina snuck back to Skyholme we became friends.”

Jordan A

“I would like to partake in your class.” partake -> participate While partake is still correct English (i think) it just sounds really weird. My 2 cents

Jordan A

“If you are faster on all of them from the day before, then your condition for the day will be done!” condition -> conditioning

Jordan A

“You will be doing all five every day and will be timed.” …every day and ‘you’ will be timed…

Ivan Kanewske

but I needed to make progresson my spell imprinting and I had so little free time now. Space between progress and on,

Ivan Kanewske

Callem looked a little perturbedhis instructor didn’t introduce himself but continued. Add a space between perturbed and his

Erick Thiemke

thanks I will hit this before I post this chapter to RR

Brianna Stormcloud

Thanks for the chapter! Gareth and his run away mouth🤣 *Edit suggestions: Gareth asked after the drumming stopped, “Are we going to be on time or maybe a bitlate> bit late, Stormy? For the twins, I had somehow >known< instinctively who it was. “It was Mera,” I told him. Gareth really seemed to be thinking about my words as I finished dressing, and he was just starring> staring at the door. So let me show >you< the first run!”  I was happy to not be (playing>remove) rushing through strenuous obstacles our first day. Callem looked a little perturbedhis> perturbed his< instructor didn’t introduce himself but continued. That would allow Gareth and I to be silently altered>alerted when Aelyn got here in the morning, and could prepare for her banging by covering our ears.

Dennis Crocker

Really enjoyed this chapter


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