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A Soldier's Life - 387 - Separation Anxiety (edited 5-3-25 +400 words, the changes will still not make the upset people happy, but it adds more detail and reasoning)

🕑 Added 2025-05-03 05:03:50 +0000 UTC

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Steven

There was a lot about this arc that I enjoyed. I would say Erik is to soft, weak, indecisive and more in this arc. There were so many doors left open in your writing that he had to change the outcome. I know this is the outcome you wanted, it just would have been nice to see him be more decisive.

Arturo Del Bosque

I enjoyed the arc, sometimes shit just goes sideways no matter how hard you try. Looking Forward to the death sentinels.

Mr. Burns

Man, i feel like people are being quite unfair. The thing I’ve enjoyed most about your books is the diversity of reactions by different characters. Yet, each character has remained true to themselves. The only complaint I’ve ever had is how quickly people “realize” they’re not on Earth and the new world has magic, but thats it. I think the children are accurate of how children are. And I also think it would weigh too heavily on Eryk to send this girl to her death when he will live for centuries. I support how write these characters despite what others have said

Dylan Alexander

Is this some convoluted way of keeping Eryk from his kid? He cares more about a random girl than Raelia?

Karnnie

First, it takes weeks of study at the quickest and that is with multiple hours a day dedicated to the endeavor to learn a new spellform. There is no way that the need was great enough for her to just imprint the spell and I doubt she was able to dedicate the time to study anything while on horseback. Lesna has to go or fall in line, she is actively trying to sabotage Eryk at this point.

Erick Thiemke

So this was a pivot. The original plot was the mc piecing together the world gates to go home. That made no sense as he had no reason to go home. So Evie is the catalyst that the patrons voted on for this. I hope in edits to smooth out the story and create some stronger reason other than that they are from Earth to save them

Ryan W Gresham

I enjoy the books but thought even though this arch was good from a content perspective it did not make much sense. He hears about other worlders and just hops over there. Plus he says he will go off with the kid for who knows how long just after saying he was excited to visit elven lands with his gf. Just seems out of left field. The arch going there finding the kid etc would be interesting not sure if your plan is that never happens. Or visits the empire. Love your work!

William

Definitely enjoyed binging this first draft of book 6 but definitely feel that there should've been some way of getting Karina out of there alive, whether by duel or escaping/fighting way out. This would've played out better by having her join Eryks group to be Evies guardian in the death sentinels while Lexi can live more safely being trained by Castile in the Duchy. She could have then returned after Evies become comfortable enough on her own to act as protect lexi once more since Castile seems to be getting more involved again with missions


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