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A Soldier's Life - 371 - The Otherworlders (added about 3300 words to old 371)

🕑 Added 2025-05-11 03:22:57 +0000 UTC

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MacMahon Wenzl

If this is the beginning of the edits and re-writes, then there will be probably be much bigger changes in the later chapters to keep in line with the new information given to the characters. (So keep that in mind). Part of the later issues that popped up are because Evie used necromancy without understanding the consequences. Now that they've been explained to her earlier in the story, many of her later actions can have different reasons and meaning behind them. I could see a few situation that might be possible now; where either her actions are removed/ changed in the story, she is writen to be a person who doesnt care about the consequences of her actions, or it becomes a situation we learn that she has no control over her power. Something like having such a high affinity with a really powerful spell form makes controlling that spell form harder. (Something like 90+ in an affinity with a spell form also requiring 90+ to use). Normally this doesn't happen since such high affinities are rare, but when it does, the person is taught and trained so they don't lose control. Since Evie is so young, she just hasn't had the opportunity to train and practice so she doesn't lose control. As for why Eyrk never heard of this or experienced issues controlling his spell forms is because he used mid and low tier spell forms, giving him more bang for his buck without the issue of control.

Lemes

I feel the same way. The book was going well until the first half, but the plot of the other worlds simply didn't fit well with what we know about the character. The story needs a lot of rewriting. The other worlds' motivations need to be better explained, but their personalities and actions also need to be improved. The way they became obsessed with that matron was very strange, and their interaction with the MC also needs to be better worked on so that Karina and Anika don't just seem like disposable NPCs. And Evie's personality needs to be better presented and much improved. As it is today, I don't feel the slightest bit interested in spending dozens of chapters watching Erik babysitting a spoiled psychopath child.

Medhanie Kidane

Am I the only one who is not feeling this other worlders story? It doesn't feel like it needs a whole book about them. More like 3 to 4 chapters and move on. It has definitely moved away from the orginal storyline of a soldiers life for me. I loved some chapters from this book don't get me wrong but the 5 other books had purposes and why everyone was getting involved at something. This one is tough and a bit random. Sorry mate 🤷🏾‍♂️


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