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A Soldier's Life - 410 - Nausis

🕑 Added 2025-06-19 00:19:11 +0000 UTC

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Erick Thiemke

I don't know. I tried having Grammarly rewrite paragraphs for me to make them more descriptive. Usually, I end up deleting half the suggestions, but I must have. missed this one

Jordan A

“We made our way through the streets, stopping at a couple of stalls for an evening bite before dinner proper.” Is ‘dinner proper’ a thing? It’s not something I’ve heard of so I’m pointing it out just in case something else was intended. Could just be me though.

Kevin

"Lesna ordered the food, and I think she ordered the entire menu, as she didn’t stop talking for a few minutes." If you are going to mention Lesna talking for an extended period of time, give us some of the things she mentions. More detailed surroundings would be nice.

Andrew

Thank you!


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