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World Sphere - 71 - First Delve

🕑 Added 2025-08-02 00:16:24 +0000 UTC

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Adam V

First dungeon, nice easy run. Edit: it was a standard evolution for neutralize poison because poisons could be purged but +[once/if] enough damage was done, it wouldn’t matter.

Ivan Kanewske

Thankfully, the misshapen creature was so ugly that I had no trouble spreading out to kill them. Maybe add Thankfully, the misshapen creature was so ugly that I had no trouble spreading out WITH EVERYONE to kill them. Also creature, should it be creatures? You are referencing one at beginning of sentence, and multiples at end of sentence, That is part of the English language that always messes with me

Ivan Kanewske

I was feeling my adrenaline spike as the blackness folded around me and chilled me my skin. Suggest I was feeling my adrenaline spike as the blackness folded around me and chilled me DOWN TO my skin AND BONES. OR I was feeling my adrenaline spike as the blackness folded around me and GOOSBUMPS POPPED UP ALL OVER my BODY.


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