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A Gladiator's Life - 5 - The Language Of Pain

🕑 Added 2025-08-13 01:13:36 +0000 UTC

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Erick Thiemke

chapter 1 - 4 were updated

Lemes

This story has the potential to be very interesting. I only have one reservation about the author's comment that it would be set about forty years before the story of "A Soldier's Life." The dates don't match MC's accounts. He said in the first chapter that he drove for Uber and had a cell phone. Uber was created in 2010, and cell phones only began to become popular in the second half of the 1990s. I think ten to fifteen years earlier would be more realistic.

Ivan Kanewske

I risked a quick look back, and two men were about fifty yards behind, with men carrying Varka on her horse just behind them. Not sure what you are saying here, Men wouldn't be carrying Varka on her horse, don't think she would have men being carried on her horse either, just whip them some more

Ivan Kanewske

The boy was maybe fifteen and the probably the best runner in the group so he was being taken out first. Remove the The boy was maybe fifteen and *the* probably the best runner in the group so he was being taken out first.

Ivan Kanewske

I would probably be limping too, if my ass didn’t throb distracting me. Suggest I would probably be limping too, if my THROBBING ass didn’t DISTRACT me.

Ivan Kanewske

I found three subligaculum that were unstained and clean. I had to look up what subligaculum was, maybe say I found three LOIN CLOTHS, I WOULD LATER FIND OUT WERE CALLED subligaculum, that were unstained and clean. That's really random info to know

Ivan Kanewske

The boy and the old man were on the other end, and our logs' diameter was less than that of the group of four. Diameter less than 4 feet? Log is smaller because the group is smaller?

Ivan Kanewske

He made me leave, and I tried to follow. Suggest He STARTED TO leave, and I tried to follow.

Virgil Washington

Imprinted his first spell as most otherworlders do.

Erick Thiemke

i did do a quick edit on the first four chapters as well to make sure he came from the 1980's. this bonus tale will get one chapter every two weeks or so.


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