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[1% LIFESTEAL] Chapter 69 - Conflict

🕑 Added 2024-02-13 16:45:04 +0000 UTC

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Nidi

I can't help but feel disappointed at this. I think it was long coming but this new character is the last straw. She gives me the nonsensical self centered princess feeling, but most of all everything around her is just unreal and forced. The last three chapters I have a constant feeling of "this is just a story", there is just no immersion. But all in all as I said that it was a long coming I think that this story peaked around chapter 26 and after it slowed down it never got up again. The worst thing is Freddy himself he went through unimaginable torture and did not changed at all. The character growth just did not happen and instead the author needs to write down stuff like "I need to stop being more cautious, think more," and in an artificial way force him to be this awkwardly heroic googy two shoes. I was expecting some inner demons while he grows in the second power level like paranoia, PTSD, anger issues, or just straight up madness. But, I don't see it. There is this saying around books, "show not tell," and there too little of that in Freddy's growth or behaviour.

Daniel Smith

While there he had access to some of the top tier workout equipment, free food, free housing, free healthcare (where they gave him steroid treatments), and was paid just to work out.

School work

Still a good long term partner but it will be a while before he ever trusts her. She makes a good foil for him to work through his issues and grow as a character though. I'm surprised he didn't consider using Blood Sacrifice...was he just too far away from the bodies? Otherwise it would have been his best bet to out heal the death touch shit.

School work

A bunch? He was handed a starter course by a top delver/arch university washout and some help from Madam for what, a few weeks, maybe a few months a best? And even then he was splitting his time between physical exercise, martial arts, and working on his various powers/techniques. He spent more time being tortured and enslaved (then recovering while faking that he was someone else) than he did actually working on his combat skills and ability to apply his techniques beyond a very simplistic level. Add in the torture and it's no surprise he's a wreck. Getting to the point where he's not only confident, but able to be blood thirsty and channel his survival instinct in a more refined aggressive manner is part of the overarching character development. He's someone who should probably be mad at the world given his life, but is too beaten/burned, and wary to express it.

Beeees!

Having to learn martial arts the hard way, alone in the woods, seems less effective. Maybe he can finally truly come into his power, instead of relying on its cheats to perform at about the level of a two star. And once all those tempering gains really start stacking, especially with on demand healing allowing the bounds to be pushed harder.

Beeees!

He's as experienced at fighting at someone would be at baseball after a year playing in high-school. He's got no idea about how to fight hordes of enemies and doesn't have some genius instinct where he can learn it in the heat of battle. All that said, with some real focused training on how to fight monsters from portal realms I'm sure a party of those two could be nearly unstoppable

Daniel Smith

Oh I'm I'm not arguing that she's not crazy, she definitely is

thaughton2

Nah. She's crazy regardless. You explain what you intend you don't just assume and push someone in a horde because you *think* they can handle it. Especially if your goal is to prove your abilities, it'd make more sense to jump in solo. Even if they have the skill, they'll fucking kill you afterward for having the gall. Not saying they won't work together long term though. The dynamic between cautious and blood-thirsty regenerators is pretty amazing/hilarious to read.

Daniel Smith

Their party would work out, he just needs to grow up and get over himself. It's not like he also wasn't handed a whole bunch of training.

Lyncher98

SECOND!

Lyncher98

Tftc

Luis Miguel Batista

First!


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