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[OUTDATED] Chapter 177 - Basilisk

🕑 Added 2025-05-28 23:00:25 +0000 UTC

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Ulises

There's more!!?? Thank God i paid the 10!!

Gerald Morris

The tourettes had me cackling

ShockedCorgi

TFTC!

Tryptic

Also Freddy would definitely say "they killed Thor" right away, and having him not say it feels like a blind spot. It doesn't matter how much Freddy cares about Thor's death, because it's the most obvious thing he can say when Basilisk accused him of assassination. He could call it out, they could deny it, and then we go into the rest of the scene.

Tryptic

I think you're right, this chapter would see a big increase in quality from a small amount of tweaking. The scene has a series of good lines, the problem is just that they're too close together and it gives the reader whiplash. I think some small, buffer lines would really help. Like mentioning Freddy's age, mentioning the goth girl's posture, mentioning the Adjudicator's visible response to the revelations. Just some less important sentences to put more distance on the page between the key sentences.

some guy

He never admitted it to Freddy. He only admitted that to Mark

신현준

Gracias

@Alphamoonman

It's this comment here that makes me guilty about my comment on the last chapter. If I knew this is what would have happened, I totally would have held back saying anything. Sorry Robert.

Kevin McGuire

Wow Basilisk is really dumb. He just admitted to nearly getting his arm ripped of by someone a whole stage behind him that's about to rank up in what two weeks and get a big boost from it and thought "Yeah its totally a great idea to make me his number 2 priority just after the horde of monsters that will help him get even stronger."

Compendium

Was the confirmation that Mark and Basilisk were responsible for what happened to him combined with that and on top of that they showed up in his city to cause trouble

Dembed

Hmmmmmm not sure I eat Freddie's reaction. After he got out of the room he did mention his whole feelings for Thor's death are very muted, due to time eroding feelings. Did not expect him to jump it this crazily even with Travis there being hysterical. Let's see how this goes

Raymond Doherty

Thought it was a dope chapter, very much enjoyed how the confrontation went 👍

Bookworm bibliophile

Honestly I enjoyed this chapter but this feels like him doing similar mistakes that he had done before and it makes sense that he does, because he is Freddy endlessly reckless and admittedly little bit dimwitted and he hadn't that much chance of growing as person. But him attacking the snake felt a little bit weird rushed. The way the goth girl interaction was written didn't convey I think what you wanted because it felt like he was genuinely scared and not doing som lip service. Also the sanke, mark, adjuster the goth girl, trevis the entire area felt small.

Ironfist95

Soz, also agree with others. I'd prefer he'd at least stated their transgressions. Murdering Thor and torturing then enslaving Freddy. Freddy showed, 'part of the gig is up', make the people around fear feddys display. And healing Lucas might show he still has more cards.

Ironfist95

Maybe Lucas's girlfriend who Freddy set up

Shawn

Calling on the wisdom of a "100 year old cultivator" falls falt when you spend 100 years being psychologicallly torture. Freddy isn't wise; he's tettering on the line between sane and insane. Plus this has to come out eventually I think this reveal is exactly like Freddy and sets the stage for a big confrontation.

Crazyone47

Who is Janice Again?

Crazyone47

Well for starters I am guessing being betrayed yet unable to take revenge is normal for people at their level of power and guys like Freddy don't rise up without some feats and being stepped on. Secondly I assume that Mark assumes that by now Bloodshed has been devoured in Mark's ascension

mehmed zepcan

Thank you for the chapters up until now. I'm going to take a break from your work ( not you me I like to binge). I would have rather you took a 2-week break if you were sick to heal up and take care of yourself. I would suggest rewriting this chapter as a fan experiencing this highly monumental moment felt very lackluster And in a very not him anymore fashion, he acted exactly the way everyone expected him to act (instead of a hundred+year-old cultivator) And it fucked up everything all over again for him kind of kind of a big bummer to the chap. Anyway, good luck rooting for you and the wish you all the best with the lil one (⁠•⁠‿⁠•⁠)

StepmasterSpoony

Something about how the first part of this chapter was written made the confrontation feel both rushed and forced at the same time. Maybe string out Mark's revelation by having Freddy talk a bit more about the time they spent together before Mark sold him out, and then tell him how he effectivly condemned Freddy to years of torture. Also the fact that Mark told everyone about Freddy's true talent but not Bloodshed seems odd in this situation, which adds to the akwardness of the scene.

Pomme

Oh please one more crashout

Kenzzs

Thanks Robert

DaWykitat

Why is he waiting again? He wants his spirit abilities maxed?

Nyroe

I thought that Freddy had accidentally advanced to the 3rd star for a second there


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