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[1% LIFESTEAL] Chapter 183 - A Beacon Among Faded Memories

🕑 Added 2025-06-10 15:31:44 +0000 UTC

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therightscript

Gear feels like another joke at the MCs expense. The reason I say that is because as soon as they started selecting gear I thought "I bet he gets armor that will make him look like a clown"...It's basically a meme at this point. Feels forced in so we can have an "Umbra laughs at Freddie and he gets turned on because he's submissive now moment" in a later chapter.

Bookworm bibliophile

I Like your story. There is aoo many ways you can take it and there is a lot of things uncovered. Your mc is just an ant in big world. Reminds a bit of death after death portaginst at the beginning.

신현준

Gracias

atgongumerki

didn't Freddy already buy a satelite for Sophia? I feel like I remember him ordering a satelite when he gave the adjudicator all that money

StepmasterSpoony

I think the talk he and Sophia had was fine all things considered. Maybe have Freddy come to the conclusion Sophia came to about Lucas with some self-reflection after some forceful prodding by Sophia instead of her spelling it out for him. That way it feels more like his own decision to the reader rather than something he's doing because Sophia told him he should do. I do agree with some of the other commenters that the gear part was a bit too much tell not show, granted with gear being bought it's a bit tricky to get across without it feeling that way. My suggestion is instead of the gear being described with Freddy's voice, show us the ad Freddy found as he would see it. That way it gives the reader a picture in their mind of the gear instead of Freddy explaing to them what the gear is and does. It doesn't seem like much of a difference, but done right it would feel much more organic.

Robert Blaise

Disagree on the gear although I'm a nerd for that kinda shit. 😭 That being said, I agree that the emotional stuff has been a bit overbearing. I'll have to find a balance in editing methinks. That being said, it isn't bad enough for an immediate rewrite.

Lucas Gulick

Suggestion: set of a tight-fitting pseudo-balaclava without 'any eye holes/a face opening'

ManguKing

Gotta be honest... too much emotional imbalance latetly. Which makes sense given the sequence of events, but way too much repeating of the same points. This chapter felt even worse to me because of all the info dump on gear. Had he been learning to Kraft his own gear, I would not have mind...

MillionLittleE

I hope she finds her path and ends up maybe not as strong as Freddy, but useful to the group.

Shawn

The gear still sounds pretty useless. Just Freddy trying to make himself feel safe. Guess we'll see when we get to the fighting

MillionLittleE

Soon everyone will realize that Sophia is kinda the sole reason Freddy is going psycho

Compendium

The outfit is gonna look fucked on a cover lol. Also wondering if it's directionally permeable for Freddy's abilities or if he's gonna rip them every time. Glad Soph is getting her hands on the tablets, 1 ability doesn't seem like enough. Even if that ability turns her into a shifting flesh abomination.

Harami666

fist ✊


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