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Mindwipe Island: Full story + Alt Chapters
🕑 Added 2023-05-18 19:41:14 +0000 UTCSo, first of all this won't be a paid post, since it's mostly the same content I already posted. After getting a lot of feedback, I wanted to try to fix the ending since I did so poorly on it. There isn't a lot I can fix without changing the substance of the story's plot, but one thing that I heard was a major contributor to the story going so poorly at the end was having Amber's POV throughout Chapter 7, calling all the details in that trial into question.
So for the "Alt" Chapters, I decided to make a couple details more clear in Chapter 6, rewrote Chapter 7 in Sally's POV so that the info in it is from a reliable source, and I wrote an alternate ending to go with the alt chapters where Sally wins instead.
I'll put one more poll up to see if this fix did enough. I don't think I can change a lot but I am hoping to at least get the worst problems fixed before the public release of the story's conclusion. For the sake of anyone who prefers the first version I'll upload both the original and the "fixed" versions here for your convenience.
