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Demon Queened - Chapter 41 - Rough Draft

🕑 Added 2024-07-08 00:04:10 +0000 UTC

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Striving Spark

Thanks! I'm not sure if Sylvanna will ever come around - I had a plan to make it happen, but Abigail stepping in to mediate sorta messed with it. We'll have to see what happens, I suppose - I promise to try and make it interesting, regardless. I'm glad the juxtaposition works - I was worried it might be a bit much, to be honest, but I really liked the idea of linking the scenes together in that way.

Striving Spark

Glad you enjoyed! I worried it was maybe too much, so I'm glad it's getting positive responses...

Maddy

I adore the juxtaposition between Sylvanna tallking about how Devilla wouldnt even spare a scrap of food for a starving child, then almost immediately Devilla literally going out of her way to feed a wild animal, even making sure its only healthy food! Such good character writing, so good

Sturstryk

Really enjoyed the chapter. Sylvanna is an interesting character, largely because she's a source of drama and conflict that isn't likely to be resolved any time soon, if ever. As much as my squishy warm heart wants everyone to get along and be happy, I know that conflict and drama are essential to a good story: the protagonists need actual obstacles to overcome in order to grow, develop, and be interesting. And while I am VERY much looking forward to the possibility of Sylvanna coming around and actually being supportive of Devilla -- and possibly there being a scene of the two "making up" and becoming "friends" in very intimate ways -- I'm also very much looking forward to Sylvanna continuing to be an interesting and complex antagonist. As for the third part, I loved it! I think the juxtaposition of Sylvanna claiming that Devilla wouldn't even share a scrap of food with someone going hungry, only to have her doing exactly that with a family of foxes who both stole from and bit her, is good setup and payoff and makes sense that they were in the same chapter. And yeah, I think it's really important for Lucy to be a first-hand witness of Devilla's kindness, ESPECIALLY when she doesn't think/know that anyone else is watching. So yeah, great stuff here, keep it up! I'm VERY much looking forward to what happens next!


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