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Naughty Magic - Chapter 7 - Stable and Shameless

🕑 Added 2024-12-15 22:26:59 +0000 UTC

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Striving Spark

Yeah, there's nothing malicious about her - just... Incredibly insensitive. This is the girl who knowingly ate the last of Olivia's food, even knowing her friend sucked at managing her diet. She's also the one who came over to make sure Olivia got food in her system anyways, though. And then proceeded to eat half of what Olivia bought.... So yeah. She's... A lot...

Sean Daugherty

That's totally fair, and you no doubt have far more experience with egg-cracking than me. I pretty much cracked my own egg, and as an enby who's fairly indifferent to how I present publicly it was a relatively low-stakes realization for me. The next chapter already went a long way to making Clarissa feel more... reasonable? (I'm not sure that's the word I'm looking for....) Her POV section makes it clear that she's not being malicious, which I figured wasn't what you were shooting for anyway.

Striving Spark

While Clarissa has many, wonderful character traits we've yet to come across... she's *also* an insensitive jerk sometimes, yes. We'll see a bit more variety from her soon enough, though. The egg density is mostly based off personal experience... It feels like it would have taken at least this much to make me hatch, back in the day. I mean, countless nights of fantasizing about dreaming into a girl didn't change anything, so why would actually changing break my shell? DX

Sean Daugherty

Clarissa is... a little bit much, honestly. I don't dislike her, but so far she feels more like a broad comic stereotype than an actual character. It kind of jars with Olivia having an existential crisis and makes Clarissa come across as a bit of an insensitive jerk. Which, granted, might be the point, I don't know? If so, please disregard everything I've just said. ^_^ Other than that, I'm enjoying the story so far. I'm glad you're not bothering with the usual tedious "keeping the secret from the family/friends/roommate" trope. You're laying on the egg thing a bit thick, maybe, but better too much than too little.

Striving Spark

She will never live it down :D

Nora Knox

I await the embarrassment when she finally realizes what they mean by calling her an egg, the years of teasing, and that she is in fact trans lol


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