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Kronii #4 [WiP]
🕑 Added 2025-02-06 06:01:51 +0000 UTCFrom now on, I will include dialogue and text in the WIP. Usually, I add text later when the drawing is finished, please correct the grammar when you guys find one.
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Comments
Y-san
I think it'll be much clear and easier to read with less repetition since it's a simple situation such as Page 1: "Why not? you were enjoying my technique didn't you?" "Who's enjoying it you creep dream on!" Page 2: "You said all that but" Thank you for the WIP i'm excited for it to finish
ZeroEro
thank you for the fix
Drojf
Page 1 I'm not sure how to reword this one tbh, but here are some suggestions. Maybe others have better suggestions. Original: "Why not? You enjoyed my technique don't you?" Fixed: 1) "Why not? You enjoy my technique, don't you?" or 2) "Why not? You enjoyed my technique, didn't you?" or 3) "Why not? You enjoyed it last time, didn't you?" Page 2 Original: "You said you are not enjoy it but" Fixed: 1) "You said you aren't enjoying it but..." (for present tense, if it's meant to be talking about the current moment) 2) "You said you didn't enjoy it but..." (for past tense, if it's meant to refer kronii's statement about the previous time)
