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Tondemo Skill - 368 - Returning Home (Bonus)
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Before leaving Rosendal, I stopped by the Merchant’s Guild to return the mansion key and settled the rent. [9] Before I could leave though, I was stopped by the Guild Master from the Merchant's Guild and ended up selling quite a few Drops worth of Higher Species Dungeon Cow and Pig meat to them.
[9] Woah, those people were kind of intense.
Once that was over, I quickly made my way to the Adventurer’s Guild to say my goodbyes to Giannino-san.
[4] “Oh, you’re leaving already?” Giannino-san looked a little sad.
[6] “Yes, well, I had fun in this city. So, thank you for having me here,”
[4] “Oh no, we should be the ones thanking you. Thanks to you, the guild managed to secure a lot meant from Higher Species Dungeon Cows and Pigs.”
[4] “Ahaha, well, thanks to the mission, I was able to secure a lot of good meat too,”
[6] “Ufufu, you’re sure there’s no way for us to convince you to stay longer?”
[4] “Haha, I need to be on my way. But I will definitely be back!”
[6] “Oho, we look forward to seeing you again~”
Eventually, I made my way to the city gates and-
“Big brother! You’re so slow!”
[4] “Oh my, it’s Lewis and everyone. Maynard, Enzo, you’re here too [5]. Are you all here to see me off?”
“Well, we did owe you big time, after all,” said Lewis.
“It’s only natural for a disciple to see off his Master!”
“That’s right, that’s right!”
I was a little embarrassed, but happy to be called Master by these two enthusiastic boys.
“Big brother, you’ll be back again?”
“Of course, I’ll definitely be back for the Dungeon Meat Festival if nothing else,”
“Really? You’ve made some really good weapons for us, I’ll definitely be stronger by next year!”
“Yeah, we’ll be able to defeat more monsters and take more meat than before!”
“Ou!!”
The Orphanage Adventurers seemed as lively and excitable as ever.
“It’s nice to see such enthusiasm, but be careful not to get injured.”
“Of course! We always keep our safety in mind.”
“That’s right. That's why we fight in groups. Right, everyone?”
“Yeah!!!”
“Oh my, is that so? Be sure to work hard. The next time I come, how about I cook up the meat you guys hunted?”
“Woohoo!! Yeahh!!!” [5]
“Master, we will do our best to practice and improve the recipes we inherited from you,” said Maynard.
“The Director already told us. Thanks to Master, our food stall would be completed very soon,”
“Ou, I’m glad to hear that,” [3] a small worry at the back of my mind disappeared. I’m glad that the Director turned out to be the good guy he seemed to be.
“It’s all thanks to you, Master,”
“Thank you so much,”
“I’ve already taught you the basics, so the rest is up to you. So, good luck!”
[5] “Hehe, the next time Master comes, I want you to be blown away by how delicious our food is,”
“Yeah, it will be so delicious that Master will moan after taking a bite~”
“Hahaha, I look forward to it,”
[8] There did not seem to be anything else to say after that. I looked at the 40 over sets of eyes staring brightly at me.
[8] “Well, instead of goodbye, I shall say ‘See you next year’”
[8] “Uuuhh, see you next year, Big Brother!!!!”
[8] “See you next year, Master!!!” [5] [5] [5]
I turned to my familiars. “Well, shall we?”
““Umu…””
[9] “Fer, are you crying?”
[9] “”Humph! It’s your imagination!!””
[9] “Heh…”
I walked through the gates, waving at the kids now and then.
“Rosendal sure is a nice place to stay,”
“”Umu, it’s a good place with delicious food.””
“”I’ll second that!!””
Still, for me, Carelina was where I feel most comfortable.
“Umu, let us go back quickly. The next dungeon challenge would be a difficult one, I hope.”
Ugh… Fer, you still remember that…
“”Oh, nice! Isn’t it just next to this country? Why don’t we go there right away?””
Ugh, this Dora-chan…
“”Dungeon--?””
Sui? Did you wake up at the word ‘dungeon’?
“Nope, we are returning to Carelina first,”
“Humph, you just want to delay our trip to the dungeon again,”
Aarghh…
“Well? Am I right?”
“No, no, who says I’m delaying anything? Ahahaha…”
“Then, why not go straight to the difficult dungeon now? We are closer to the dungeon than Carelina-”
“W-we have to go back first! That’s right, we have to go home and check on our house and servants. It’s been nearly three months, I’m sure everyone’s worried. It’s really time to go back!”
“No problem, we will return now. However, our next trip after that… humph, I’m sure you should know, yes?”
[9] Eehhh, is this a threat? Is he threatening me after I made fun of him crying just now?
“…yes, I get it. We’ll go challenge the Kingdom of Elman's dungeon…”
“Humph, that’s all I need to know,”
“Yahoo! A high difficulty dungeon! Awesome! Let’s goooo!! [5]””
“”A dungeon~? Yay~~!”
“Now that it’s been decided, let us return. Get on,”
Hahhh, I guess it can’t be helped.
Reluctantly, I got on Fer’s back and… woah!
“Hey, Fer, aren’t you going a bit fast?”
“How many times have you travelled on my back? Just get used to it already!”
“Wait, but this is too fast! I’ll fall off!” [5]
“Humph, just grab on and keep quiet, I’m going to speed up!”
“No no no, don’t do that! I’ll die! Wawa-waaaaaa….”
[9] This is definitely revenge for pointing out his maidenly tears!!
[9] Ferrr!!!
Fer: I did not cry
Gumi: Sure you didn’t
Fer: It was not canon, it was never in the canon. Therefore, it never happened
Gumi: You keep telling yourself that, you big fluff
Fer: Gununu, curse you, creative editor!!
Gumi: Even with the padding, the chapter only just grazed passed 900, tch
[1] Structural Change: Combine 2 paragraphs
[2] Structural Change: Combine 3 paragraphs
[3] Structural Change: Combine paragraph & dialogue
[4] Structural Change: Change passive sentence to dialogue
[5] Delete Repetitive or Pointless Information.
[6] Additional Information for Aesthetic Purpose
[7] Add Dialogue Tag
[8] Creative Licence Taken – Fixed the ‘goodbye’ scene. Make it more emotional instead of a repeat of a series of dialogue goodbyes.
[9] Padded the chapter without it looking like extra padding.
