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Chapter 162: Mechanical Phalanx

🕑 Added 2023-12-23 16:35:01 +0000 UTC
Chapter 162: Mechanical Phalanx

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John Isaac Mahaffey

Poor Nemo. With the amount of fish Alain caught, Jasmine's diet was about to change. "Have you talked with Mirscella?" Priam asked, looking at the others. Around the fire, everyone was Something odd in the spacing between these lines. Not sure what. Maybe the font size? Maybe you're using double-spacing and you added an extra one? It visibly looks off.

John Isaac Mahaffey

"It’s a great idea !" Unnecessary space before exclamation point.

Gabriel

The hoplites should barely be an inconvenience since Kazuki’s wife was struggling with the same round that Priam won back on the moon and she’s supposed to be one of the strongest of their species.

Kevin Albers

I honestly feel bad for Jasmine since that system quest to assassinate all rivals is such a bait by the Concepts to fuck her over

PriÀm

Corrected, thanks!

Fred

Maitrises -> Masteries?

Joshua LaBarge

It feels like things aren't going to go well with the hoplites

Jonas

Thanks for the great chapter

Baconwargod

Woooooo kazuki will be very happy to see his wife

PriÀm

oops, you're right, corrected!

Andrew

Thank you!

Pievalley

Thanks for the chapter

bcd051

Honestly, I'm a big fan of training arcs. Some stories have the MC with some downtime and they don't do any training and it's sooo frustrating. Also, I look forward to this story everyday, its friggin awesome.

Derze

Interesting. Priam mentions he gains the Fire concept twice btw. Was the second time meant to be a question towards Jasmine? As in “do you have a fire concept as well as shadows?” Along those lines…. Or something like : “[…]awakened a bloodline and unlocked a concept," […] “"I unlocked the Fire Concept….” Shouldn’t it be “It’s Fire. I’ve unlocked the Fire concept.” Not sure if I managed to convey the confusion I had. But it’s mostly how it’s worded. I think the second one was meant to be phatic

_mori

Great chapter! Jasmine’s probably in her early/mid 20s like Priam, and it’s taken her over a decade to get close to unity. I wonder how high her affinity is.

PizzaTime123

<3


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