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Loopbreaker - Book 2 - Chapter 39

🕑 Added 2025-12-24 14:00:08 +0000 UTC

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Rusted Gears

I like this story a lot but this chapter just felt like it didn’t fit. The conversations felt repetitive and going from him telling Tormund, to not telling him was weird. Tormund talked to him like he knows but it said he doesn’t know. Seems strange Tormund isn’t calling him out about his techniques if he doesn’t know about the loops. He should take a few loops to go up his magic stat with his sister at the school since it seems to be holding him back with the regeneration life core stuff. Maybe a loop or two where he kicks his dad and older brothers asses as well because he probably can now and it would show just how much he’s improved. His dad is such a piece of shit it would be cathartic to see him kill the dude at least once.

Kyfe

Yeah, it's time for a large boost in Skill Levels and to move on. His growth with the axe and smithing have been slower per death than his growth with the sword. Also, with all the smithing, axe training, and ursaloth fighting he's been doing, his physical Stats should have seen some improvement, so maybe add that in or simply inform us if it's been accounted for. I think a better use of the word count over the past several chapters, instead of just repeating the same thing over and over with minor numbers going up, it would be better to add an Arc where he rotates aligning himself with the various different factions to learn more about the factions, the people, and diplomacy in general. I don't see a reason he would avoid this knowing he can fix mistakes and try new things. He might also want to try a few rounds back at the Academy to train in Magic with his Stat finally growing and see if he can increase his pace and magical repertoire. His sister would definitely teach him spells regardless of the consequences.


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