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Chapter 96

🕑 Added 2021-11-19 20:01:01 +0000 UTC

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Matt DiMeo

These armies are absurdly large to be moving about on these timescales.

Pike

You wrote they were in 2nd place not 3rd.

Tom sawicki

The zoom out was seamless imo. As always, very solid chapter!

Daniel Childers

Confused about the "larger picture" that was trying to be written. Can someone explain?

Oliver Wolfe

I missed someone on Matt’s team saying that Olivia was the better commander, though it wasn’t a huge miss. Someone of value saying that to Alyssa could alleviate the issue a bit and light a fire under her butt to perform not manipulate.

A summary with highlights is the perfect approach to these kind of battles now as you've already completely fleshed out the first major battle previously and to have a repeat would just be kinda boring and repetitive.

Zebrababies

It seems like a few other people have mentioned something along the lines of this, but I'm struggling with the scale of the war. It's difficult to process such large numbers. I'm not sure there's a better way to write it, but I figured it was worth mentioning.

Christian Basso

While I liked the idea of the zoomed idea, I would have preferred a little time skip and a recap after.

Charles handgis

I enjoyed the zoom out. I think it would be easy to get bogged down in a war this big. The troop numbers alone are massive but make sense to me given how big the empire is. I have enjoyed the war so far but I like the idea of speeding up the pace a bit so it doesn’t become stale.

J S

I rather liked this chapter. It’s neat to see the big picture.

Vickie Chan

"Matt felt like he should be out there, leading the troops in each attack and watching them come back with far fewer troops than they went out with." This sentence didn't make sense to me. Do you mean, "instead of watching them come back with far fewer troops..."?

Mythloving99

"Updated Pather Team Ranking (Kingdom of Seven Suns): 2nd place. Estimated Daily Stipend: 2,500 points. The points for the siege, along with their team keeping third place in the Kingdom rankings, earned them 36,000 points." The table listing says the team is 2nd place, the next sentence mentions the team keeping 3rd place; the numbers don't match unless I am missing something.

Buzz1089

I really liked this zoomed out section. I feel like a lot of authors, especially in this genre, are too afraid to do it and it causes pacing issues. One of the things I love most about your story is that you actually let time pass. We don't need to see every single day, especially when it's very similar to stuff we've already read before, like this siege vs the last one.

Adurna

As a side note I will say that I am enjoying Alyssa a lot as a character in this story :)

Logrus

Your doing the "world is huge so every number must be orders of magnitude larger than normal" thing that a lot of cultivation novels get so wrong. Scale back a bit. Otherwise a solid chapter.

Stylemys

They more or less agreed they were square after Annie killed her and burned down her entire closet. If that wasn’t enough, Liz would have needed to make that clear immediately. Waiting until you need a huge favor to suddenly recalculate a settled debt doesn’t usually work well. Especially when Liz can’t afford hostilities with one of the people on the council who will side with her.

Mousehowl

I understand you wanted to zoom out, but that's not the feeling I got. The rapid exposition snippets felt rushed and made me think you were bored with the war. The brief interactions with Olivia and Alyssa were the only worthwhile parts, but more words were dedicated to the war that doesn't earn a comment. With that said, thanks for a chapter to advance the story and possibly setup an irritated Alyssa.

TerrestrialOverlord

I'm actually quite unhappy. I completely understand how Liz was still mad from the time that Alyssa used them to score points which made her blind to everything but her goal. The thing that makes me quite upset is how Liz never makes mention of it and how Alyssa owed her for using them and they are already square instead she acknowledges the debt and basically, Alyssa doesn't get told how much they resent her for what she did and how it was only not finding a legal way to kill her repeatedly without screwing their side that made them hold back....yeah now the little shit thinks she's the incarnation of the word genius!!!

Kris Boxall

Alyssa’s pettiness really is on another level

Obbu

Edit Suggestions: Is someone who can't stop a fire in their closest -> Is someone who can't stop a fire in their closet They wanted to get the city in good enough shape ->They wanted to get the city in good enough shape (Double space)

Storyhunter

While they got off on a deadly wrong foot. I get the feeling Alissa's missing critical info still. Though Liz needs to learn how to deal with issues like this.

Storyhunter

With Liz having input in the larger picture. + Going over seige warfare again and again. This situation is good to have a bit of fast forward as while at first war is exiting..... The situation changes over time as the actors get used to the stage. More used to there counterparts moves.

Javier Runco

After the stuff she pulled. I don't see any reason It would be in Team bucket interest to have her as a commander instead of Olivia. I does seems like Liz did the Team a huge service. I don't understand why Olivia couldn't let Alyssa in command if it was such a big deal. Seems like that is what was going to happen anyways. I also do not understand the threat of calling in the favor. Does she has a" You have to support me in any one thing I try to pass card"? I thought this kinds of deals usually happens in the same voting. Like adding clauses to legislation you are about to pass to get the support you need. I can't wrap my head around how it would work otherwise.

hmDrake

I dunno, her "favor" was to grab power for herself in a way that tangentially helped someone else. The best she could hope to cash in is something along the lines of a helping hand that also helps Team Bucket.

Tjark

Have to agree here. The numbers make sense only in the sense that it's a war in an empire of trillions. But looking closer things like sudden appearances/ambushes of millions of troops are unbelievable to me. We were told there was a spy in their command structure in the beginning of this chapter that suppressed communication for them last chapter. But after that we're to believe that the Kingdom couldn't even see an army coming that's big enough that seeing the other side with a naked eye should be impossible?

Tjark

Only thing like that is Crack skill shard I think. At least so far.

Monus

Thanks for the chappy Someone needs to boink both Liz and Alyssa on the head.

Andrew

Thank you!

Adurna

Not to mention the major sabotage previously. There is no reason to think a bit of minor and still self-centered political helpfulness would make one forget the previous elimination she caused. Rather I think this is the first payback where her interests were actually hurt. I think treating Alyssa as being even with her would make more sense beyond this point. At least on Matt's end even if Liz is not breaking free from her intrinsic bloodline dislike

LordDark

Question: Are there going to be any Meta skills? Like a skills that makes other skills homing, delayed cast, overcharged, or multi cast?

Crushing Despair

I would expect the favor to be limited to the current war. Otherwise, when Liz falls from the path, this favor would be equal to a favor from her t48 parents, such price would be ridiculous.

Pyrefiend

If Alyssa actually wanted their relationship to improve, she should have stopped acting like an insufferable prick. It's almost impossible to appreciate her actions, regardless of how beneficial they are, when she always has that smug "everything is going according to my plans" demeanor.

crusaderstar

About rhe zoomed out perspective, I think it was a little cavalier in the number of troops frequently moving around, undermined verisimilitude for me. A five million person army is absolutely gigantic, requiring an immense and intricate hierarchy to coordinate and move, and a mind boggling amount of space, which I didn't get the feeling of here. I don't think you need that scale for their battles though, maybe divide by 100? Armies in the tens of thousands?

GunsOfPurgatory

Yes but also, the favor has to be reasonable. Like, she can't expect them to go on a suicide mission for her as a favor, for instance. If she decides to wait hundreds of years I have a hard time seeing that favor being honored unless it's not that important to Liz and Matt.

Good point. Alyssa's best move might be to keep that favour on the down low for a couple centuries, then cash it in when they're actually at war in a situation that puts Liz's reputation on the line. I doubt that will happen because it would no longer be plot relevant, but it would be an interesting choice.

Yeah, and ya know what? Alyssa's not even wrong. Like, sure she's exaggerating with her friendship speech, but she really had been helping them out, even if only to secure her position. Her response to the assassination made it hard to put it into perspective, but they Did go kill her for setting them up earlier. On a purely mathematical basis, they were even. Now don't get me wrong, Alyssa is unpleasant, but I personally think she had the right of it this time. (Besides the fact that she murdered like, seven of their generals to get there. That's more or less unrelated though.)

Enzo Elacqua

Usually I wouldn’t consider favors that big a deal. But with the potential for immortality and almost certainty for Liz and Matt it becomes a lot more important. At higher levels the only currency that really matters is trust

C_Mantis

yeah clearly this style isnt my strong suit.

Derze

Thanks

Dominic Pernicone

That's going to come back to bite Liz in the ass I guarantee it. There'll be some situation where Liz is about to get something really good and Alyssa is gonna pull that favor.

Jonas

Thanks for the great chapter It was nice but a little strange at the beginning like suddenly we were on a scene and it felt like I skipped a chapter but it may be that I forgot the last chapter hmmm?

Frank

Tftc! Alyssa is going to become a very big problem for Team Bucket, I’m guessing…


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