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Breach: Chicago War Zone - 11th October 2020 - WIP

🕑 Added 2020-10-10 19:42:58 +0000 UTC

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Duuuuude I can't believe the demo's here. THANKYOU!!

BlueEyedDevil

THANK YOU THANK YOU WIP!!!!!!

Sedona Duchnick

I actually haven't finished the demo yet (I'm loving it though), but I just noticed the compliments in the stat screen and I had to come and comment to say how much I love that as a feature. It just made me smile and I really needed that today. Thank you so much for all the hard work you've all been doing!

Raymond Watson

The story thus far is awesome, so much so that when it stopped the demo I was like oh damn.., I feel like I am watching some major cliffhanger from a favorite television show or something lol. I can not wait for more. Thank you so much for this huge reprieve from the hellish year we all have been having. You folks there are beyond awesome, Thanks once again!

NyxExodus

No, gotta wait for the full game

Twirly Muffin

Lol right. I have waited forever to be reunited with Gabe and suddenly Anna is in bed with me.

Raymond Watson

It is quite shocking then when I chose Raquel as my girl and in downtime scene where you wake up to someone holding you hand and low and behold.., It was Justin, i was like what the.. lol

Raymond Watson

Okay sorry but this will be my last comment for now lol. parallel to the sough side of the basement~ soigh is supposed to be south

Raymond Watson

here are two more places ~"It'll quite the daring travel and absolutely nasty, but you'll be hidden and you can go about things quietly" I believe it would be better to say -it'll be quite the daring travel...- then there is ~"However it is we get into the cargo bay, from there, we go through to the vault access, go down in the basement, open the vault, get the money, and get out" Mouse says.~ where it says "However it is we get.. I think it should be "However if we get.."

Raymond Watson

Also at this section ~He sags his head down once more, accepting his face as Michael rolls up the map once more and stores it away in his suit jacket.~ I believe that where you put face you was meaning fate if I am not mistaken.

Raymond Watson

I just wanted to point out a paragraph in the story where you may wish to redo the wording here.. ~You hold him still and you see him trying to break free, but alas, you close in, and stare him down with all your pouring every bit of horrible thought into your gaze.~ would it not sound better to put -You hold him still and you see him trying to break free, but alas, you close in, and stare him down while pouring every bit of horrible thought into your gaze.- I hope I am not overstepping here by making a suggestion.

Twirly Muffin

Also, I had the same problem a few others did, the love interest seems to be zeroed in on whoever your uriel is. So that's a weird scene. Also full character creation and essentials only seem to be the same.

Twirly Muffin

So excited to see this here. A few typos here and there but can't blame you for that since you uploaded at like 3am.

Raymond Watson

can i load my character from the first game here or no?

Lourdes Ramos

Of course the Demo would end in *THAT* exact place 😭😭 Its a fantastic start to this book. I loved the pacing of it, I often find the middle book lacking and am disappointed but this was really good!

Lourdes Ramos

I was expecting gabriel and got Anna in that scene and was like WOAH 😳 but okay πŸ€·πŸ½β€β™€οΈ Anna is my fave girl

NyxExodus

No need for apologies! It’s worth the wait! The only buggy thing were the love interest, gabe is my main but I got Justin??

Hailey Castaneda

As an Illinoian I love that it’s set in Chicago, I know it’s not very helpful but I love the first game and I love the second game as well I appreciate you all thank you for making me happy β™₯οΈπŸ€—

Kiyan

Thank you for delivering all the good stuff!! Hope you get some good rest :)

Heyy, great job! Just a heads up, Anna and Charlie as a love interest keep sipping through other storylines. For example, I chose Gabriel and got Anna instead.

Dusty

Love the stats screen my dude and right back atcha

You've done so well, have a good night! Much love from SwedenπŸ˜πŸ‡ΈπŸ‡ͺ

😁 Thanks for all the hard work you guys are awesome


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