James_D_Fawkes
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Sunder 5.5
🕑 Added 2018-03-26 08:20:31 +0000 UTC And it's done!Well, mostly. My editor still needs to give it a pass, but I like this version better, so I can't imagine he'll have too much to correct. In either case, I'll swap out this version for that revised version when he's gone through it with a comb, but since he's offline right now, that'll have to wait until tomorrow.
For now, here you guys go.
I'm not sure how many of you took the chance to read the CiP version and watch the evolution of this chapter from the previous version to this one, so I shan't spoil anything, now.
This is, however...not quite the end of this arc. There's still a few chapters left. As for the main confrontation that's supposed to arise... That may or may not get pushed back to arc 6, Tyranny. We'll see. I'll have to read up how canon handles that confrontation, because I have a hard time imagining that fight lasting all of arc 6.
Tomorrow, I start work on 5.6 and 5.7 - yes, simultaneously, because I happen to know where both start and where 5.6 ends. As an apology for the extreme delay in this one, everyone will be getting the CiP for 5.6, although CiP 5.7 defaults back to the $13+ guys.
Comments
Peter Christensen-Calvin
Wow. This is MUCH better than the previous version. I was a little worried that future events we readers aren't privy to had tied you into a messy ending of the Vista plot thread, but it seems that worry was for nothing. Glory Girl is an excellent add to this, and that Vista added her at the last minute makes total sense. I was a little thrown off by Piggot authorizing an operation that includes unmasking Taylor, but in context Vista already knew, and Clockblocker had to be let in on the truth once he confronted the director. GG knowing my makes things messy, but that's outside of the parameters Piggot was working with. Overall a great chapter, and I am kinda desperate to read the next!
Velzon
As others have said this version is much improved of the earlier removing the other wards that didnt have a real reason for being there but adding glory girl and clockblocker (if he was not there) was great having one of the wards actually go and ask about what is going on is even better. I fully support this version as well as going into an introspection with Taylor on how young Vista is and how she just does not understand. Good job my man good Job.
